Some people believe that not all prisoners should be kept in prison, but some of them should be allowed to do unpaid work to help the community. Do you agree or not? v.1
Some people believe that not all prisoners should be kept in prison, but some of them should be allowed to do unpaid work to help the community. Do you agree or not? v. 1
Applying for a certain job in this modern era become more and more arduous due to the competition of the different organizations. Employers nowadays, consider formal academic qualification as a priority, rather than the qualities of the employees, while other commenters, still agree with the issue. The writer, strongly disagrees, with the latter view and the reasons will discuss below, followed by a conclusion.
To start with, having a wide experience at work is more important that having a formal academic qualification, because there are numerous advantages or benefits. First, it does not need a numerous training to cope up with the job. Second, they already have a wide background, which they can apply to their next job. For instance, a newly hired manager, knows how to manage the employees because of her past experience.
Furthermore, a positive attitude or personal qualities like hard working, diligent and cooperative are more likely to be considered too when it comes to job. Even though, they are not highly intellectual, but acquiring these desirable qualities it helps the company to become successful and strong. These attitudes can build a trust to the customers and to the organization, which it will lead to a successful work. For instance, a dedicated worker promoted well due to his hard work despite the fact the fact that he is not highly intelligent like others.
To sum up, although a formal academic qualification is essential for the progress of a company, however, I believe that acquiring a desirable quality and life experience are considered to be a priority when it comes to a work.
Applying for a certain
job
in this modern era become more and more arduous due to the competition of the
different
organizations. Employers nowadays, consider formal academic qualification as a priority,
rather
than the
qualities
of the employees, while other
commenters
,
still
agree
with the issue. The writer,
strongly
disagrees, with the latter view and the reasons will discuss below, followed by a conclusion.
To
start
with, having a wide experience at
work
is more
important
that having a formal academic qualification,
because
there are numerous advantages or benefits.
First
, it does not need a numerous training to cope up with the
job
. Second, they already have a wide background, which they can apply to their
next
job
.
For instance
, a
newly
hired manager, knows how to manage the employees
because
of her
past experience
.
Furthermore
, a
positive
attitude or personal
qualities
like
hard working
, diligent and cooperative are more likely to
be considered
too when it
comes
to
job
.
Even though
, they are not
highly
intellectual,
but
acquiring these desirable
qualities
it
helps
the
company
to become successful and strong. These attitudes can build a trust to the customers and to the organization, which it will lead to a successful
work
.
For instance
, a dedicated worker promoted well due to his
hard
work
despite
the fact the fact
that he is not
highly
intelligent like others.
To sum up, although a formal academic qualification is essential for the progress of a
company
,
however
, I believe that acquiring a desirable
quality
and life experience
are considered
to be a priority when it
comes
to a
work
.
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