Topic: Extreme sports such as sky diving and skiing are very dangerous and should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view? v.1
Topic: Extreme sports such as sky diving and skiing are very dangerous and should be banned. with this view? v. 1
Nowadays, the question of whether extreme sports, like sky diving or skiing, should be banned or not has been receiving a great deal of public attention. Although this prohibition appears plausible in some ways, I agree with those think that extreme sports should be welcomed more.
There are several reasons why vigorous sports should not be banned. First, since the original purposes of those sports have considered as survival skills. In fact, people have to learn how to move on ice and snow in many heavy-snow countries or pilots have to know how to parachute, which can save their lives when something unexpected happens. Second, by proliferating of protective equipment, such as brakes, helmets and pads. This means that players will be ensured to participate in extreme sports with little risks, which makes them feel safer when playing.
It can be denied the positive effects of extreme sports brings us. Furthermore, if people want to expose their emotions such as anxiety or fear, It would be an effective way for them to challenge themselves. Plenty of evidence suggests that participating vigorous sports helps partakers reduce stress or frustrations, which brings them new experiences in their lives. Lastly, in order to increase their ability to stamina and solve sudden problems, people should engage in extreme sports. This means that every time people overcome their challenge, they also overcome their fear, which helps people become more confident and mature in any situations.
In conclusion, on the whole based on the above discussion, I agree that vigorous sports should be encouraged instead of prohibiting.
Nowadays,
the question of whether
extreme
sports
, like
sky diving
or skiing, should
be banned
or not has been receiving a great deal of public attention. Although this prohibition appears plausible in
some
ways, I
agree
with those
think
that
extreme
sports
should
be welcomed
more.
There are several reasons why vigorous
sports
should not
be banned
.
First
, since the original purposes of those
sports
have considered as survival
skills
. In fact,
people
have to
learn how to
move
on ice and snow in
many
heavy-snow countries or pilots
have to
know how to parachute, which can save their
lives
when something unexpected happens. Second, by proliferating of protective equipment, such as brakes, helmets and pads. This means that players will
be ensured
to participate in
extreme
sports
with
little
risks
, which
makes
them feel safer when playing.
It can
be denied
the
positive
effects of
extreme
sports
brings us.
Furthermore
, if
people
want to expose their emotions such as anxiety or fear, It would be an effective way for them to challenge themselves.
Plenty
of evidence suggests that participating vigorous
sports
helps
partakers
reduce
stress
or frustrations, which brings them new experiences in their
lives
.
Lastly
, in order to increase their ability to stamina and solve sudden problems,
people
should engage in
extreme
sports
. This means that every time
people
overcome their challenge, they
also
overcome their fear, which
helps
people
become more confident and mature in any situations.
In conclusion
,
on the whole
based on the above discussion, I
agree
that vigorous
sports
should
be encouraged
instead
of prohibiting.
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