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Topic: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Teachers should be paid according to how much their students learn. Give specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. v.4

Topic: Teachers should be paid according to how much their students learn. Give specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. v. 4
Education plays an important role in one’s life so as teachers. Teachers build the base of education when we are kids till we end up studying at the university. Some people believe that efforts of teaching students should be valued by paying according to how much the students learn from teachers. However, I definitely believe that it is unfair to pay teachers like that because it will create discrimination among the students in the class, students will lose their opportunity to widen their knowledge from their professors in areas other than the test syllabus, and teachers do not have control selecting the students for their class. To begin with, if professors or teachers are paid according to students learning, they will be unfair to the students who are below average in their performance. These students need more attention form teachers as it takes more time to learn things for them as compare to other students. If professors are paid according to students’ grade, they will try to focus on bright and average students who can get the high score easily. Thus this will create discrimination among the students, and students who require more help from their teachers will stay behind in their class. In addition, if teachers are getting money according to students’ score, they will teach them the material which will be on the test. They will not waste their time teaching them about the topics that are not related to the exam. For an instance, when I was in 12th grade in India, we had the board test and I joined the class of the professor to prepare for the test. It was a private institute, the professor was paid on our score. The professor was teaching us only for the topics which are important for the test in that class. I often went to him if I had any questions, and he explained me in details if he was free, but in class he taught us only exam oriented syllabus. This is because he was paid on the students’ grade in the board, and we lost our chance to learn the topic in details. Thus this will narrow down the students’ opportunity to widen their knowledge from their professors. Last but not least, teachers do not have choice to select the students for his class. The school or college decides the class size and students for his class. If in one class, most of the students are smart, they will get the high score with less efforts. However, if one class is full of mediocre students, over all score for that class will remain low instead of teacher’s great efforts. Thus we cannot decide teachers’ skill according to students learning. To sum it up, some people think that teachers should be paid according to students’ learning. I totally disagree with that because teachers will differentiate their students according to their intelligence, students will not get chance to broaden their knowledge from their teachers, and teachers do not choose students for their class so their efforts will not be valued properly.
Education plays an
important
role in one’s life
so
as
teachers
.
Teachers
build the base of education when we are kids till we
end
up studying at the university.
Some
people
believe that
efforts
of teaching
students
should
be valued
by paying
according
to how much the
students
learn from
teachers
.
However
, I definitely believe that it is unfair to pay
teachers
like that
because
it will create discrimination among the
students
in the
class
,
students
will lose their opportunity to widen their knowledge from their
professors
in areas other than the
test
syllabus, and
teachers
do not have control selecting the
students
for their
class
.

To
begin
with, if
professors
or
teachers
are
paid
according
to
students
learning, they will be unfair to the
students
who are below average in their performance. These
students
need more attention form
teachers
as it takes more time to learn things for them as compare to other
students
. If
professors
are
paid
according
to
students’
grade, they will try to focus on bright and average
students
who can
get
the high
score
easily
.
Thus
this will create discrimination among the
students
, and
students
who require more
help
from their
teachers
will stay behind in their
class
.

In addition
, if
teachers
are getting money
according
to
students’
score
, they will teach them the material which will be on the
test
. They will not waste their time teaching them about the topics that are not related to the exam. For an instance, when I was in 12th grade in India, we had the board
test
and I
joined
the
class
of the
professor
to prepare for the
test
. It was a private institute, the
professor
was
paid
on our
score
. The
professor
was teaching us
only
for the topics which are
important
for the
test
in that
class
. I
often
went to him if I had any questions, and he
explained
me in
details
if he was free,
but
in
class
he taught us
only
exam oriented syllabus. This is
because
he was
paid
on the
students’
grade in the board, and we lost our chance to learn the topic in
details
.
Thus
this will narrow down the
students’
opportunity to widen their knowledge from their professors.

Last
but
not least,
teachers
do not have choice to select the
students
for his
class
. The school or college decides the
class
size and
students
for his
class
. If in one
class
, most of the
students
are smart, they will
get
the high
score
with
less
efforts
.
However
, if one
class
is full of mediocre
students
, over all
score
for that
class
will remain low
instead
of
teacher’s
great
efforts
.
Thus
we cannot decide
teachers’
skill
according
to
students
learning.

To sum it up,
some
people
think
that
teachers
should be
paid
according
to
students’
learning. I
totally
disagree with that
because
teachers
will differentiate their
students
according
to their intelligence,
students
will not
get
chance to broaden their knowledge from their
teachers
, and
teachers
do not choose
students
for their
class
so
their
efforts
will not
be valued
properly
.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
73Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay Topic: Teachers should be paid according to how much their students learn. Give specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. v. 4

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
513 words
5.5
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