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DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE WITH THE FOLLOWING STATEMENT? TEACHERS SHOULD BE PAID ACCORDING TO HOW MUCH THEIR STUDENTS LEARN. Give specific reasons and examples to support your opinion v.381

TEACHERS SHOULD BE PAID ACCORDING TO HOW MUCH THEIR STUDENTS LEARN. Give specific reasons and examples to support your opinion v. 381
There is no doubt that these days children grow up faster than before, therefore through time their commitment to parents changes. However, the question: How do parents should affect their children's lives? Is being a controversial issue nowadays. In this essay I am going to examine this phenomenon from several viewpoints? On one side of the argument, there are people who argue that parents should allow their kids to take decisions lonely after 16 years old. The main reason for believing in this is that kids nowadays are different than before 20 years and each generation is being more independent quicker than the previous one. For example, several teenagers finish their high school at the age of 16 and they have to be able to join a university and act independently daily. Furthermore, the new technology is playing an important role in the kids' parent relationship. On the other hand, it is also possible to consider it with the opposing case. It is often argued that in fact parents must have an effective place in their children's opinions because of their lack of experience and knowledge. Moreover, the new world is not safe for them to start alone, so they need support and advice all the time. For instance, some parents are being connected to their kids wherever they are, even if they are studying or working abroad through smart phones and devices. In conclusion, as we have seen there is no easy answer this question, however, I tend to believe that parents care will never end towards their children and it is a required one because of its honesty and sincerity.
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,
therefore
through time their commitment to
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parents
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changes
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However
, the question: How do
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parents
should affect their children's
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lives
? Is being a controversial issue nowadays. In this essay I am going to examine this phenomenon from several viewpoints?

On one side of the argument, there are
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people
who argue that
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parents
should
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allow
their kids to take decisions lonely after 16 years
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old
. The main reason for believing in this is that kids nowadays are
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different
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than
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before
20 years and each generation is being more independent quicker than the previous one.
For example
, several
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teenagers
finish their high school at the age of
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16 and
they
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have to
be able to
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join
a university and act
independently
daily.
Furthermore
, the new technology is playing an
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important
role in the kids'
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parent
relationship.

On the other hand
, it is
also
possible to consider it with the opposing case. It is
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often
argued that in fact
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parents
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must
have an effective place in their children's opinions
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because
of their lack of experience and knowledge.
Moreover
, the new world is not safe for them to
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start
alone,
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so
they need support and advice all the time.
For instance
,
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some
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parents
are
being connected
to their kids wherever they are, even if they are studying or working abroad through smart phones and devices.

In conclusion
, as we have
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seen
there is no easy answer this question,
however
, I tend to believe that
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parents
care will never
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end
towards their children and it is a required one
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because
of its honesty and sincerity.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay TEACHERS SHOULD BE PAID ACCORDING TO HOW MUCH THEIR STUDENTS LEARN. Give specific reasons and examples to support your opinion v. 381

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
272 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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