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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Teachers should be paid according to how much their students learn. Give specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. v.351

Teachers should be paid according to how much their students learn. Give specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. v. 351
Due to the advancement of technology if you want to get information then an internet is an important source. However, Some people believe that museums are used to preserve history. In my opinion, I disagree with this point as it demand more money to maintain this. To begin with, if we store historical things in museum needs continuous monitoring and also maintain the record that which museum keeps record of what item. Moreover, the Government has to keep it open all the time so people can visit these places otherwise they avoid to visit such place if having only a limited time period. Survey related to this conducted in India says that people want to acquire information in a fraction of time while in museum, they have to spend a large time even in some scenario they also have to stand in a queue. On the other hand, using the Internet person can get an idea about any historical place or an information about any culture is easily available to any part of the world. In other words, they can also access this same information as many times as they want. Even details you get from the internet is more so if you are doing research on some culture than it provides wider information and also do the comparison with other cultures. In conclusion, the museum can be used as a storage of historical items, it needs more attention and money of government which can also be used for other recreational activity; that will be found from as Internet.
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get
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information
then an internet is an
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important
source.
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people
believe that
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museums
are
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used
to preserve history. In my opinion, I disagree with this point as it demand more money to maintain this.

To
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begin
with, if we store historical things in
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museum
needs continuous monitoring and
also
maintain the record that which
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museum
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keeps
record of what item.
Moreover
, the
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Government
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has to
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keep
it open all the
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time
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so
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people
can visit these places
otherwise
they
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avoid to visit
such place if having
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only
a limited
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time
period. Survey related to this conducted in India says that
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people
want to acquire
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information
in a fraction of
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time
while in
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museum
, they
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have to
spend a large
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time
even in
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some
scenario they
also
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have to
stand in a queue.

On the
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other
hand, using the Internet person can
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get
an
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idea
about any historical place or an
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information
about any culture is
easily
available to any part of the world. In
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other
words, they can
also
access this same
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information
as
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many
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times
as they want. Even
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details
you
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get
from the internet is more
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so
if you are doing research on
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some
culture than it provides wider
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information
and
also
do the comparison with
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other
cultures.

In conclusion
, the
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museum
can be
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used
as a storage of historical items, it needs more attention and money of
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government
which can
also
be
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used
for
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other
recreational activity; that will
be found
from as Internet.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Teachers should be paid according to how much their students learn. Give specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. v. 351

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
259 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
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