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TOPIC # 55 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? A person should never make an important decision alone. v.2

TOPIC # 55 A person should never make an important decision alone. v. 2
Getting some advice and consulting have no harms. So it is better to remember that advice is cheap and to use it rather than taking our important decision alone. I totally agree with this statement on the following grounds. First and foremost, it is rational to receive pieces of advice from those who have similar experiences and related expertise. Consulting gives us the opportunity to hear others’ perspectives, prevents us from repeating their mistakes, broadens our line of thought, and gives us a more comprehensive image of our options. As man’s outlook is usually limited, he might inadvertently ignore some obvious and serious cons of an option, while he is magnifying some pros of it. Another important point is that we should also talk to our family or friends. They might not have the accurate knowledge about the field of our decision, but at least they know our characteristics, interests, and future goals. And they can help us determine whether it is suitable for us or not. For example, my friend was so fond of studying abroad, however her mother reminded her that she is so emotional and dependent to her family, and she might soon get homesick. So she gave up on her dream. Last but not least, after talking to experts and our family, the last decision is up to us. As soon as, we gathered thorough information about preferences and weighed the advantages and disadvantages, we can make our final decision and accept its responsibility so as not blame others in the future. Back to the previous example, my friend is now married, but she has always regretted her decision and points the finger at her mother. Although, she could have not survived there alone. To sum it up, I believe it is much better to benefit from others’ knowledge and experiences to make a more certain decision and not to repeat others' mistakes.
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advice and consulting have no harms.
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it is better to remember that advice is
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cheap
and to
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use
it
rather
than taking our
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important
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decision
alone. I
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with this statement on the following grounds.

First
and foremost, it is rational to receive pieces of advice from those who have similar experiences and related expertise. Consulting gives us the opportunity to hear others’ perspectives,
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prevents
us from repeating their mistakes, broadens our line of
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thought
, and gives us a more comprehensive image of our options. As
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man
’s outlook is
usually
limited, he might
inadvertently
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ignore
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some
obvious and serious cons of an option, while he is magnifying
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some
pros of it.

Another
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important
point is that we should
also
talk to our family or friends. They might not have the accurate knowledge about the field of our
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decision
,
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but
at least they know our characteristics, interests, and future goals. And they can
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help
us determine whether it is suitable for us or not.
For example
, my friend was
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so
fond of studying abroad,
however
her mother reminded her that she is
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so
emotional and dependent to her family, and she might
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soon
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homesick.
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she gave up on her dream.

Last
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but
not least, after talking to experts and our family, the last
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decision
is up to us. As
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soon
as, we gathered thorough information about preferences and weighed the advantages and disadvantages, we can
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make
our final
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decision
and accept its responsibility
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so
as not blame others in the future. Back to the previous example, my friend is
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now
married,
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but
she has always regretted her
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decision
and points the finger at her mother.
“Although” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Although
, she could have not survived there alone.

To sum it up, I believe it is much better to benefit from others’ knowledge and experiences to
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make
a more certain
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decision
and not to repeat
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You can never understand one language until you understand at least two.
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IELTS essay TOPIC # 55 A person should never make an important decision alone. v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
317 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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