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TOPIC # 55 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? A person should never make an important decision alone. v.1

TOPIC # 55 A person should never make an important decision alone. v. 1
t is believed by some that the price of a service or an item is an essential factor to consider before deciding to purchase it. This essay believes that people should take into consideration the cost before deciding to buy or not. Firstly, this essay will discuss the benefits of considering the price before making a purchase and secondly, how wanting expensive items can lead to crippling debts. On the one hand, people should be given enough time to think about the price of something before acquiring it. They need to consider if they can afford it as this can give them problems in the future. They need to think about their monthly expenses as well as their overall salary, to see if they can afford what they want, and making sure they do not get into debt. For example, a survey by the Business Mirror Philippines in 2010 revealed that 8 out of 10 Filipinos preferred to save the money needed before buying a new cellphone, rather than using a credit card because they were afraid of having monthly debts. On the other hand, over the last few decades, the rise of credit card debt has been escalating. More and more people are tempted to buy products without considering the price due to the pressure from advertisements, peer pressures and the ready access to credit cards. There are a lot of luxury items that have been purchased using credit cards, which in return has lured many individuals into debt. For instance, a study by the Metrobank of the Philippines reported that 99% of credit card applications came from minimum wage earners who wanted a credit card to purchase high-end products. In conclusion, I agree that people should plan first before making a decision to buy expensive products or services for this could only give them problems in the future if they cannot afford it.
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is believed
by
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some
that the
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price
of a service or an item is an essential factor to consider
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before
deciding to
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purchase
it. This essay believes that
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people
should take into consideration the cost
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before
deciding to
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buy
or not.
Firstly
, this essay will discuss the benefits of considering the
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price
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before
making a
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purchase
and
secondly
, how wanting expensive items can lead to crippling debts.

On the one hand,
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people
should be
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given
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enough
time to
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think
about the
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price
of something
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before
acquiring it. They need to consider if they can afford it as this can give them problems in the future. They need to
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think
about their monthly expenses
as well
as their
overall
salary, to
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see
if they can afford what they want, and making sure they do not
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get
into debt.
For example
, a survey by the Business Mirror Philippines in 2010 revealed that 8 out of 10 Filipinos preferred to save the money needed
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before
buying a new cellphone,
rather
than using a
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credit
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card
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because
they were afraid of having monthly debts.

On the other hand
, over the last few decades, the rise of
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credit
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card
debt has been escalating. More and more
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people
are tempted
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
products without considering the
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price
due to the pressure from advertisements, peer pressures and the ready access to
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credit
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cards
. There are
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a lot of
luxury items that have been
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purchased
using
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credit
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cards
, which in return has lured
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many
individuals into debt.
For instance
, a study by the
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Metrobank
of the Philippines reported that 99% of
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credit
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card
applications came from minimum wage earners who wanted a
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credit
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card
to
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purchase
high-
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end
products.

In conclusion
, I
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agree
that
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people
should plan
first
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before
making a decision to
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buy
expensive products or services for this could
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only
give them problems in the future if they cannot afford it.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay TOPIC # 55 A person should never make an important decision alone. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
315 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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