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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? A person should never make an important decision alone. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.71

A person should never make an important decision alone. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 71
Modern world dictating the rapid development of mobile phones and changing accessibility for the children. Cellular phones by some people are suitable for the children, whether others don't share the same opinion. In this essay, I will explain both sides and give my point of view. There is some apparent reason why people meant to allow children to have mobile phones outwits others disagree. The first to mention is that rapid technology growth, changing childhood rapidly. Today young humans are most often exposed to mobile phones instead of playing outside, which could reflect on their health in the future. For example, children can use the phone if they need to call adults from school or on the way home if something happened. I can see pros when children using and possess phones on the proper usage and if they are supervised by their parents. General disagreement that children needs to have a mobile phones contradict with firs group. Furthermore, most of the parents can't control all children's behaviour because they are trying to protect them from different circumstances in what they can be involved. As a bad example, we can see a lot of children how they are using too many social networks. I can understand the decisions to forbid younger children over usage of the phones in wrong purpose. In conclusion, technology innovation has an important role for the people, but children need to be controlled by the mobile phone usage. Also, always we can look both sides as positive or negative approach, but my overall opinion supporting children to use phones but must be balanced and controlled by adults.
Modern world dictating the rapid development of mobile
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phones
and changing accessibility for the
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children
. Cellular
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phones
by
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some
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people
are suitable for the
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children
, whether others don't share the same opinion. In this essay, I will
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explain
both sides and give my point of view.

There is
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some
apparent reason why
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people
meant to
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allow
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children
to have mobile
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phones
outwits others disagree. The
first
to mention is that rapid technology growth, changing childhood
rapidly
.
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Today
young humans are most
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often
exposed to mobile
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phones
instead
of playing outside, which could reflect on their health in the future.
For example
,
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children
can
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use
the
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phone
if they need to call adults from school or on the way home if something happened. I can
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see
pros when
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children
using and possess
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phones
on the proper usage and if they
are supervised
by their parents.

General disagreement that
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children
needs to have a mobile
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phones
contradict with firs group.
Furthermore
, most of the parents can't control all children's
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behaviour
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because
they are trying to protect them from
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different
circumstances in what they can
be involved
. As a
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bad
example, we can
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see
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a lot of
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children
how they are using too
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many
social networks. I can understand the decisions to forbid younger
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children
over usage of the
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phones
in
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wrong
purpose.

In conclusion
, technology innovation has an
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important
role for the
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people
,
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but
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children
need to
be controlled
by the mobile
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phone
usage.
Also
, always we can look both sides as
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positive
or
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negative
approach,
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but
my
overall
opinion supporting
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children
to
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use
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phones
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but
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must
be balanced
and controlled by adults.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay A person should never make an important decision alone. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 71

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
271 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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