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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? A person should never make an important decision alone. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.272

A person should never make an important decision alone. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 272
Since ancient period, Women's rights are always questionable. While some persons who follow conservatism, opposing on the thoughts. However, Modern thinkers know the truth and agree with women prospects. In this essay, I am focusing on why we should give equal chances for women as men on briefly with suitable examples. To start with, psychologically, Women are multi-tasking. They have an ability to manage both family tasks as well as works and also their involvement is unconditionally high on both of them. They are seriously focusing and give much productivity on their jobs. For example, you see the Indian Space Research Scientists ‘Ritu Karidal’, ‘Nandini Harinath’ like so many women who they are more passionate about their works and taking care of children effortlessly. Secondly, Today Economic condition is going on high. In a family, a husband and wife should both go to the office, then only they can manage their expenses and saving money on putting various schemes. Especially, middle class people always afraid of children's education, hospitality like so many factors. Therefore, if we have to handle them effectively, they should have to contribute equally by doing employment. For instance, In India, The Economic Times had recently conducted a survey that 70% of women going occupation for carrying the needs of their family. To conclude, Old thinkers should have to come out of their sceneries on women's perspectives. Consequently, women should be independently do the things than before and expose their identity
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some
persons who follow conservatism, opposing on the thoughts.
However
, Modern thinkers know the truth and
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agree
with
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women
prospects. In this essay, I am focusing on why we should give equal chances for
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women
as
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men
on
briefly
with suitable examples.

To
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start
with,
psychologically
,
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Women
are multi-tasking. They have an ability to manage both family tasks
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as well as
works and
also
their involvement is
unconditionally
high on both of them. They are
seriously
focusing and give much productivity on their jobs.
For example
, you
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see
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Ritu
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Karidal
’, ‘
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Nandini
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Harinath
’ like
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women
who they are more passionate about their works and taking care of children
effortlessly
.

Secondly
,
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Today
Economic condition is going on high. In a family, a husband and wife should both go to the office, then
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only
they can manage their expenses and saving money on putting various schemes.
Especially
, middle
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class
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people
always afraid of children's education, hospitality like
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so
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many
factors.
Therefore
, if we
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have to
handle them
effectively
, they should
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have to
contribute
equally
by doing employment.
For instance
, In India, The Economic Times had recently conducted a survey that 70% of
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women
going occupation for carrying the needs of their family.

To conclude
,
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Old
thinkers should
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have to
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come
out of their sceneries on women's perspectives.
Consequently
,
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women
should be
independently
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do
the things than
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before
and expose their identity
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay A person should never make an important decision alone. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 272

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
243 words
This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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