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TOPIC# 26 It has recently been announced that a new movie theater may be built in your neighborhood. Do you support or oppose this plan? Why? v.2

TOPIC# 26 It has recently been announced that a new movie theater may be built in your neighborhood. Do you support or oppose this plan? Why? v. 2
the movie theater has a key role in our life. It can provide nice space in our neighborhood. Some people support this plan and some disagree. In my view, It can be positive for two important reasons. First, the opportunity for the job would increase. For example, if a movie theater builds in my neighborhood, they need some workers that are good for people to live here. moreover, they need receptions acter or other people and student that study in art school can communicate with acter in teacher and choose a job in the future, In another world, their self-confidence is increased because they sure there are a place that they can participate and speak with actor and ready until one day can themselves be on there. A gloom place changes with a noisy one easily. Laughing of children and playing in nearby the theater make a good sense in other people. The different topic can be shown neither for adult nor for children too. SO, it can be a place for every age from the child until adult one. Second, in our free time, we can go and have a good time there. Take myself as an example, when I come back from work there aren' t any places in our neighborhood to relaxing and enjoy. If built here people like me certainly be delighted. Because they don' t any hobby and entertainment. Movie theatre makes people more creative. Furthermore, they think about what happened in the movie and can be affected on people' s attitude. They give lessons, learn about life, and relationships with each other, also. The theater is better than watching TV or go to the cinema. Because it is shown live. We sense the emotion of acter In sum, a movie teacher is a good place both of entertainment and job.
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movie
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has a key role in our life. It can provide nice space in our neighborhood.
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Some
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people
support this plan and
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some
disagree. In my view, It can be
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positive
for two
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important
reasons.

First
, the opportunity for the job would increase.
For example
, if a
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movie
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theater
builds in my neighborhood, they need
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some
workers that are
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good
for
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people
to
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live
here.
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moreover
, they need receptions
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acter
or other
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people
and student that study in art school can communicate with
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acter
in teacher and choose a job in the future, In another world, their self-confidence
is increased
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because
they sure there are a
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place
that they can participate and speak with actor and ready until one day can themselves be on there. A gloom
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place
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changes
with a noisy one
easily
. Laughing of children and playing in nearby the
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theater
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make
a
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good
sense in other
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people
. The
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different
topic can
be shown
neither for adult nor for children too.
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SO
, it can be a
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place
for every age from the child until adult one.

Second, in our free time, we can go and have a
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good
time there. Take myself as an example, when I
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come
back from work there
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#039; t any
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places
in our neighborhood to relaxing and enjoy.
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built here
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like me
certainly
be delighted
.
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they
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Movie
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theatre
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makes
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people
more creative.
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, they
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think
about what happened in the
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movie
and can be
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affected
on
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people&
#039; s attitude. They give lessons, learn about life, and relationships with each other,
also
. The
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theater
is better than watching TV or go to the cinema.
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Because
it
is shown
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live
. We sense the emotion of
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acter


In sum, a
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teacher is a
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good
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both of entertainment and job.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
25Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
10Mistakes
If you talk to a man in a language he understands, that goes to his head. If you talk to him in his own language, that goes to his heart.
Nelson Mandela

IELTS essay TOPIC# 26 It has recently been announced that a new movie theater may be built in your neighborhood. Do you support or oppose this plan? Why? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
306 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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