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Question: It has recently been announced that a new movie theater may be built in your neighborhood. Do you support or oppose this plan? Why? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer. v.2

Question: It has recently been announced that a new movie theater may be built in your neighborhood. Do you support or oppose this plan? Why? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer. v. 2
I oppose the idea of building a new movie theater in my neighborhood for the following reasons. First of all, building a new movie theater is going to make the neighborhood a very crowded, and unsafe place to live. When my husband and I bought our house, one the most important criteria for us was buying a house in a very quiet place because of several reasons. First off, I have sleeping problems and any single noise can disturb my sleep, and decrease quality of my life. Furthermore, there are so many kids in my neighborhood. Adding a movie theater to the neighborhood, is going to make it an unsafe place. Since so many movie theaters serve alcohol these days. So, I think the chance that someone being under influence of alcohol or possibly drugs, run over kids would increase. In addition, drunk drivers usually drive above speed limits because alcohol affects brain in a way that disturb their ability to judge and understand that they are driving too fast. Second, I believe building a movie theater is going to decrease the monetary value of my house. I believe as soon as they build a movie theater in the area, other businesses are going to develop as well e. g. a mall or restaurants which is going to affect the merely residential property of the neighborhood, and decrease the value of it since my neighbor is marked up for being only residential area. Third, I do not assume it is a good marketing choice to build a new movie theater in my neighborhood because there are couple different movie theaters such as Starplex movie theater which is around 10 miles away from my neighborhood. The great advantage of those movie theaters is they are also very close to the restaurants, recreational facilities, spas, and chain drug stores like Walgreens and CVS. So, I believe it makes it a lot easier trip for people who are trying to plan a perfect night out. In a nutshell, I believe building a new movie theater in my neighborhood is a very bad idea. Building a new movie theater is not only going to make the neighborhood a noisy, unsafe neighborhood but also it is going to decrease the value of the houses in this area. In addition to those reasons, it is not a good marketing idea because there are other movie theaters not far away.
I oppose the
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for the following reasons.

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First of all
,
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new
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theater
is going to
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neighborhood
a
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very
crowded, and unsafe place to
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live
. When my husband and I
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bought
our
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house
, one the most
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important
criteria for us was buying a
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house
in a
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very
quiet place
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because
of several reasons.
First
off, I have sleeping problems and any single noise can disturb my sleep, and
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decrease
quality of my life.
Furthermore
, there are
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so
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many
kids in my
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neighborhood
. Adding a
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movie
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theater
to the
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neighborhood
, is going to
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make
it an unsafe place.
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Since
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many
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theaters serve alcohol these days.
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, I
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think
the chance that someone
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being
under influence of alcohol or
possibly
drugs, run over kids would increase.
In addition
, drunk drivers
usually
drive above speed limits
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because
alcohol affects brain in a way that disturb their ability to judge and understand that they are driving too
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fast
.

Second, I
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believe
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building
a
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movie
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theater
is going to
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decrease
the monetary value of my
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house
. I
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believe
as
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soon
as they build a
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movie
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theater
in the area, other businesses are going to develop
as well
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e. g.
a mall or restaurants which is going to affect the
merely
residential property of the
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neighborhood
, and
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decrease
the value of it since my neighbor
is marked
up for being
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only
residential area.

Third, I do not assume it is a
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good
marketing choice to build a
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new
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movie
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theater
in my
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neighborhood
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because
there are couple
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movie
theaters such as
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Starplex
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movie
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theater
which is around
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10 miles
away from my
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neighborhood
. The great advantage of those
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movie
theaters is they are
also
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very
close to the restaurants, recreational facilities, spas, and chain drug stores like Walgreens and CVS.
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So
, I
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believe
it
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makes
it a lot easier trip for
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people
who are trying to plan a perfect night out.

In a nutshell, I
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believe
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building
a
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new
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movie
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theater
in my
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neighborhood
is a
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very
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bad
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idea
.
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is not
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only
going to
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the
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a noisy, unsafe
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neighborhood
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but
also
it is going to
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decrease
the value of the
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houses
in this area.
In addition
to those reasons, it is not a
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good
marketing
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idea
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because
there are other
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movie
theaters not far away.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
58Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay Question: It has recently been announced that a new movie theater may be built in your neighborhood. Do you support or oppose this plan? Why? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer. v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
403 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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