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Too much money has been spent looking after and repairing old buildings. We should knock them down and build modern ones instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.2

Too much money has been spent looking after and repairing old buildings. We should knock them down and build modern ones instead. v. 2
Presently, with the increasing in populaion the public is showing interest in constructing the new buildings. Besides, these people feels that they had to invest a lot of moneyin seeing and modifying a building. In this essay, I disagree with this viewpoint and suggest my opinion. Interestingly, people are interested in demolishing the ancient buildings and they want to construct a building with the modern facilities. While it may help them in achieving their goals, they were causing a huge damage to the environment. Moreover, they are also trying to destroy the memories, whereas these people are not inspiring their childern to know the value of the precious monuments. A research stated 90% of the parent's influenced their children to stay in a modern home. On the other hand, the cost of renovating a building is very cheap because of the advancements in the modern technology. So, the government, who are supporting for this idea, should try to reduce the tax. If a person had tried to implement the renovation, then they are aware of the eco-firendly methods. For instance, to construct a demolishing the old home, it costs two times more than the normal budget. In the conclusion, a likely reason why most of the people are willing to construct a new building by destroying an ancient construction because they were showing interest in the modern facilities. Though they may not only cost heavily, they were causing a huge damage to ecosystem. However, a plenty of memories are being shattered in destroying the area. I believe that it is not good for constructing a building by destroying the previous one.
Presently
, with the increasing in
populaion
the public is showing interest in constructing the new
buildings
.
Besides
, these
people
feels
that they had to invest
a lot of
moneyin
seeing and modifying a
building
. In this essay, I disagree with this viewpoint and suggest my opinion.

Interestingly
,
people
are interested
in demolishing the ancient
buildings and
they want to construct a
building
with the
modern
facilities. While it may
help
them in achieving their goals, they were causing
a huge damage
to the environment.
Moreover
, they are
also
trying to
destroy
the memories, whereas these
people
are not inspiring their
childern
to know the value of the precious monuments.
A research
stated 90% of the parent's influenced their children to stay in a
modern
home.

On the other hand
, the cost of renovating a
building
is
very
cheap
because
of the advancements in the
modern
technology.
So
, the
government
, who are supporting for this
idea
, should try to
reduce
the tax. If a person had tried to implement the renovation, then they are aware of the eco-
firendly
methods.
For instance
, to construct a demolishing the
old
home, it costs two times more than the normal budget.

In the conclusion, a likely reason why most of the
people
are willing to construct a new
building
by destroying an ancient construction
because
they were showing interest in the
modern
facilities. Though they may not
only
cost
heavily
, they were causing
a huge damage
to ecosystem.
However
, a
plenty
of memories are
being shattered
in destroying the area. I believe that it is not
good
for constructing a
building
by destroying the previous one.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS essay Too much money has been spent looking after and repairing old buildings. We should knock them down and build modern ones instead. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
271 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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