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All education (primary, secondary and further education) should free to all people and paid and managed by the government. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.2

All education (primary, secondary and further education) should free to all people and paid and managed by the government. v. 2
Education is one of the most essential facets of the modern world. Generally, an educated person has such advantages as a better job, a place at a higher hierarchy of a society, etc. before their uneducated counterparts. Education, as a result, is considered to be a luxury item in many countries mostly available for wealthy individuals who consist of only a small proportion of a whole population. Therefore, there have been numerous suggestions making all education levels free of charge and supervised by the government; thus, studying in school, college and university becomes available for all people. Free education managed and funded by the government is believed to have several drawbacks. According to statistics provided by tertiary educational institutes, there is a significant difference in undergraduate students’ average grades between US students, who pay tuition, and Gulf countries’ students, who are funded by the government. Money is acknowledged to be the main cause for the discrepancy since US students spend own money on education which serves as an incentive to study harder, while Arab students funded by the government have relatively less incentive as it comes for free. Moreover, if all educational levels are managed by the government, it is likely that curriculum in educational institutes becomes homogeneity; thus, there can be less competitiveness as well as less progress in science. Harvard University, which is an independent and self funded university, for instance, is outstanding among the other top universities in the USA due to the fact that the institute provides unique programs; however, if Harvard was not an independent institute and had the same curriculum as well as the other universities, the institute would fail to be the best in the world. Affordable education for all people, nevertheless, has also advantages. Since education is very expensive in most countries only a few individuals can afford. Free education funded by the government, therefore, is able to equalize a number of wealthy and poor students in university and colleges. In addition, educational institutes managed by the government provide higher standards of education. For example, there are some unscrupulous colleges and universities which enroll students who wish only diplomas to get a job and fail to provide proper education in the third world countries. On the contrary, the government can suppress the activity of such educational institutes by imposing state standards to follow. Bearing in mind pros and cons of free education supervised by the government, it seems that higher educational institutes should remain chargeable entities, however, they should provide more affordable tuition fees.
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is one of the most essential facets of the modern world.
Generally
, an educated person has such advantages as a better job, a place at a higher hierarchy of a society, etc.
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before
their uneducated counterparts.
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Education
,
as a result
,
is considered
to be a luxury item in
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many
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countries
mostly
available for wealthy individuals
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who
consist of
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only
a
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small
proportion of a whole population.
Therefore
, there have been numerous suggestions making all
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education
levels
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free
of charge and supervised by the
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government
;
thus
, studying in school, college and
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university
becomes available for all
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people
.

Free
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education
managed and
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funded
by the
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government
is believed
to have several drawbacks. According to statistics provided by tertiary
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educational
institutes, there is a significant difference in undergraduate
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students’
average grades between US
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students
,
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who
pay tuition, and Gulf
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countries’
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students
,
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who
are
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funded
by the
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government
. Money
is acknowledged
to be the main cause for the discrepancy since US
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students
spend
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own
money on
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education
which serves as an incentive to study harder, while Arab
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students
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funded
by the
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government
have
relatively
less incentive as it
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comes
for
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free
.
Moreover
, if all
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educational
levels
are managed
by the
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government
, it is likely that curriculum in
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educational
institutes becomes homogeneity;
thus
, there can be less competitiveness
as well
as less progress in science. Harvard
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University
, which is an independent and self
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funded
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university
,
for instance
, is outstanding among the other top
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universities
in the USA due to the fact that the institute
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provides
unique programs;
however
, if Harvard was not an independent institute and had the same curriculum
as well
as the other
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universities
, the institute would fail to be the best in the world.

Affordable
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education
for all
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people
,
nevertheless
, has
also
advantages.
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Since
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education
is
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very
expensive in most
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countries
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only
a few individuals can afford.
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Free
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education
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funded
by the
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government
,
therefore
, is able to equalize a number of wealthy and poor
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students
in
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university
and colleges.
In addition
,
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educational
institutes managed by the
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government
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provide
higher standards of
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education
.
For example
, there are
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some
unscrupulous colleges and
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universities
which enroll
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students
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who
wish
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only
diplomas to
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get
a job and fail to
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provide
proper
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education
in the third world
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countries
.
On the contrary
, the
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government
can suppress the activity of such
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educational
institutes by imposing state standards to follow.

Bearing in mind pros and cons of
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free
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education
supervised by the
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government
, it seems that higher
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educational
institutes should remain chargeable entities,
however
, they should
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provide
more affordable tuition fees.
19Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
61Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay All education (primary, secondary and further education) should free to all people and paid and managed by the government. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
422 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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