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TOEFL Speaking Question Type: INTEGRATED LISTENING/SPEAKING: QUESTIONS 5: and the sample answer. Ref NO: 2009122005 v.1

TOEFL Speaking Question Type: INTEGRATED LISTENING/SPEAKING: QUESTIONS 5: and the sample answer. Ref NO: 2009122005 v. 1
AT PRESENT MASS OF PEOPLE MIGRATING TO ANOTHER NATION FOR SEVERAL REASON. HENCE, THE CULRTURE IS BECOMING ALMOST SAME ALL OVER THE GLOBE. FIRSTLY, THE FOLLOWING ESSAY WILL DISCUSS WHAT ARE THE CAUSES BEHIND HE CHANGE AND SECONDLY, HOW IT COULD HAVE A DETRIMENTAL EFFECT ON THE ANCIENT TRADITIN OF EACH NATION. LASTLY, WHAT ARE THE ADVANTAGES TERITORY IS OBTAINING FOR BEING IN ONE CULTURE. TO START WITH THE CAUSES, THE MAJOR REASON PF HAVING ONE CULTURE IS THE MIGARTION. AND PEOPLE MOIVE TO ANOTHER COUNTRY BECAUSE THEY DO NOT HAVE ENOUGH OPPOERTUNITY TO EXLPORE THE PROFESSION FULLY IN THE HOME COUNTRY. HENCE, THEY CHOOSE TO MOVE, CONSEQUENTLY, THIS MADE THE SPREAD OF SAME CUSTOM IN THE WORLD. FOR INSTANCE, UNITED STATE IS NOW CONSIDERED TO HAVE ONE RELIGION AS THERE ARE LOT ODF PEOPLE MIGRATED FROM ANOTHER COUNTRY. FROM THE NEGATIVE POINT IF VIEW, WHEN THERE IS A SAME CULTURE AROUND HE WORLD, THE FORTHCOMING GENERATION UNABLE TO DISTINGUISE BETWEEN THE ORIGINAL CULTURE OF TEIR RESIDENCIAL NATION. THIS MAY NEGATIVELY AFFCET THEOIR ORIGINAL CUTURE BY NOT HAVING ENOUGH INFORMATION. AS ARESULT, THE OLD RELIGION AND CUSTOM WOUYLD BE FORGOTTEN BY PEOPLE. FOR EXAMPLE, CULTURE ASSOCIATION OF THE CANADA REPORT SAYS THAT CANADIAN CIVILIAN ARE UNAWARE OF THE TRADITION OF THE CRISHTMUS AS 60% OF THE CITIZENS ARE BASICALLY FROM ANOTHER TERRITORY. FROM THE GOOD SIDE OF HAVING SAME CUSTOM IS THE PRESENCE OF LESS RACISM ALL AROUD THE WORLD. SO, WHEN WE ALL FOLLOW SAME TRADITION, WE ALL ENJOY LIFE AT FULLY AS WE ALL RESPECT IT WITH DIGNITY. IN ADDTIION, FUTURE GENERATION ALSO DO NOT HAVE CONFUSION IN BETWEEN PLETHORA OF CUSTOMS. FOR INSTANT, IN MOST OF THE EUROPIAN COUNTRIES USED TO FOLLOW THE SAM CULTURE AS THIS AMKE THE UNITED COMMUITY. IN CONCLUSION, IT IS BETTER TO HAVE THE ONE CULTURE AROUND THE GLOBE AS IT HAVE MORE BENEFITS OF HAVING SO. NONETHELESS, WE SHOULD NOT NEGOTIATE THE CONSEQUENCE OF VANISHED CUTOMS AS THEY ARE THE IDENTITY OF THE PEOPLE COME FROM.
AT PRESENT MASS OF
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PEOPLE
MIGRATING TO ANOTHER NATION FOR
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SEVERAL REASON
.
HENCE
, THE
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CULRTURE
IS BECOMING ALMOST SAME ALL OVER THE GLOBE.
FIRSTLY
, THE FOLLOWING ESSAY WILL DISCUSS WHAT ARE THE CAUSES BEHIND HE
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CHANGE
AND
SECONDLY
, HOW IT COULD HAVE A DETRIMENTAL EFFECT ON THE ANCIENT
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TRADITIN
OF EACH NATION.
LASTLY
, WHAT ARE THE ADVANTAGES
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TERITORY
IS OBTAINING FOR BEING IN ONE CULTURE.

TO
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START
WITH THE CAUSES, THE MAJOR REASON PF
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HAVING
ONE
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CULTURE
IS THE
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MIGARTION
. AND
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PEOPLE
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MOIVE
TO ANOTHER COUNTRY
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BECAUSE
THEY DO NOT HAVE
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ENOUGH
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OPPOERTUNITY
TO
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EXLPORE
THE PROFESSION
FULLY
IN THE HOME COUNTRY.
HENCE
, THEY CHOOSE TO
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MOVE
,
CONSEQUENTLY
, THIS MADE THE SPREAD OF SAME
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CUSTOM
IN THE WORLD.
FOR INSTANCE
, UNITED STATE IS
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NOW
CONSIDERED TO HAVE ONE RELIGION AS THERE ARE LOT ODF
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PEOPLE
MIGRATED FROM ANOTHER COUNTRY.

FROM THE
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NEGATIVE
POINT IF VIEW, WHEN THERE IS A SAME
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CULTURE
AROUND
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HE
WORLD, THE FORTHCOMING GENERATION UNABLE TO
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DISTINGUISE
BETWEEN THE ORIGINAL
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CULTURE
OF
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TEIR
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RESIDENCIAL
NATION. THIS MAY
NEGATIVELY
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AFFCET
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THEOIR
ORIGINAL
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CUTURE
BY NOT
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HAVING
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ENOUGH
INFORMATION. AS
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ARESULT
, THE
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OLD
RELIGION AND
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CUSTOM
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WOUYLD
BE FORGOTTEN
BY
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PEOPLE
.
FOR EXAMPLE
,
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CULTURE
ASSOCIATION OF THE CANADA REPORT SAYS THAT CANADIAN CIVILIAN ARE UNAWARE OF THE TRADITION OF THE
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CRISHTMUS
AS 60% OF THE CITIZENS ARE
BASICALLY
FROM ANOTHER TERRITORY.

FROM THE
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GOOD
SIDE OF
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HAVING
SAME
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CUSTOM
IS THE PRESENCE OF LESS RACISM ALL
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AROUD
THE WORLD.
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SO
, WHEN WE ALL FOLLOW SAME TRADITION, WE ALL ENJOY LIFE AT
FULLY
AS WE ALL RESPECT IT WITH DIGNITY. IN
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ADDTIION
, FUTURE GENERATION
ALSO
DO NOT HAVE CONFUSION IN BETWEEN PLETHORA OF CUSTOMS. FOR INSTANT, IN MOST OF THE
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EUROPIAN
COUNTRIES
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USED
TO FOLLOW THE SAM
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CULTURE
AS THIS
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AMKE
THE UNITED
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COMMUITY
.

IN CONCLUSION
, IT IS BETTER TO HAVE THE ONE
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CULTURE
AROUND THE GLOBE AS IT HAVE MORE BENEFITS OF
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HAVING
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SO
. NONETHELESS, WE SHOULD NOT NEGOTIATE THE CONSEQUENCE OF VANISHED
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CUTOMS
AS THEY ARE THE IDENTITY OF THE
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PEOPLE
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COME
FROM.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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Nelson Mandela

IELTS essay TOEFL Speaking Question Type: INTEGRATED LISTENING/SPEAKING: QUESTIONS 5: and the sample answer. Ref NO: 2009122005 v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
335 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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