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Describe a journey you made where you learned something new You should say What happened on the journey what forms of transport you used how you felt and explain what you learned which was new v.1

Describe a journey you made where you learned something new You should say What happened on the journey what forms of transport you used how you felt and explain what you learned which was new v. 1
The progress of a state is often measured by the economic growth, therefore many governments focus more on their economic progress rather than other aspects. However, some people have a contrasting view as they believe that political stability, security, social condition and education are equally important for the advancement of a nation. On the one hand, many federations pay more attention to economic development than other aspects of life as they believe that economic growth plays an important role in the development of a nation. When a country's economy develops, it ensures business ventures, new job opportunities and the authorised institutions can collect more funds through taxes. This fund could be used for the improvement of other sectors such as education, public infrastructures and military services. On the other hand, even though economic growth plays an essential part, governments must ensure a better living standard and green environment. The economic condition of a country will not grow without the support of a secure social condition, better political condition and advanced educational system. Investors will not place their investment in countries that have an insecure governings such as Afganistan or Iraq. And then, without the existence of educated and skilled workers, it will be difficult for a country to improve their industrial and trade activities. Therefore, the growth of the economic sectors should be aligned with other important sectors. In conclusion, it is undeniable that wage boosting plays plethora role in the development of a nation. However, I personally believe that besides economic progress, better education, social welfare, security and political stability are equally important for the sustainable emerging society.
The progress of a state is
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measured by the
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economic
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growth
,
therefore
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many
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governments
focus more on their
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economic
progress
rather
than
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aspects.
However
,
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some
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people
have a contrasting view as they believe that political stability, security, social
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condition
and education are
equally
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important
for the advancement of a nation.

On the one hand,
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many
federations pay more attention to
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economic
development than
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other
aspects of life as they believe that
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economic
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growth
plays an
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important
role in the development of a nation. When a country's economy develops, it ensures business ventures, new job opportunities and the
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authorised
institutions can collect more funds through taxes. This fund could be
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used
for the improvement of
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other
sectors such as education, public infrastructures and military services.

On the
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other
hand,
even though
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economic
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growth
plays an essential part,
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governments
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must
ensure a better living standard and green environment. The
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economic
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condition
of a country will not grow without the support of a secure social
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condition
, better political
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condition
and advanced educational system. Investors will not place their investment in countries that have an insecure
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governings
such as
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Afganistan
or Iraq. And then, without the existence of educated and skilled workers, it will be difficult for a country to
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improve
their industrial and trade activities.
Therefore
, the
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growth
of the
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economic
sectors should
be aligned
with
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other
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important
sectors.

In conclusion
, it is undeniable that wage boosting plays plethora role in the development of a nation.
However
, I
personally
believe that
besides
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economic
progress, better education, social welfare, security and political stability are
equally
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important
for the sustainable emerging society.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Describe a journey you made where you learned something new You should say What happened on the journey what forms of transport you used how you felt and explain what you learned which was new v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
269 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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