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Face-to-face communication is better than other types of communication such as letters, email, or telephone calls. How far you agree or disagree with this statement? v.1

Face-to-face communication is better than other types of communication such as letters, email, or telephone calls. How far you agree or disagree with this statement? v. 1
Choice is a freedom which every person possesses. It is widely claimed that there are numerous options to choose from. This trend is an advantage as we can choose from a wide range of options but it can cause confusion. On the one hand, when a human being is given an umpteen number of choices, their mind will be in a state of perplexity which may lead to chaos. They will not have a proper objective to select what they intended to get and end up with something which is useless. To illustrate this, a research study conducted by the "University of Wales" in the United Kingdom shows that the 90% of humans will be baffled when the number of choices increases. On the other hand, the variety should be an attribute of buying an excellent product. If we have a wide range of options, we will be able to choose what is best for us. For example, buying a mobile phone can be a tedious job, but when we are provided with different options according to its specifications, the task becomes easier and productive. In addition to this, different choices in career path have proliferated over the years, which facilitates the students to choose what they intend to pursue. In a recent survey conducted by the "Times Now" magazine shows that the number of career choices multiplied from 2000 to 2010 and it proves its efficiency at 90% of the students are satisfied with it. In conclusions, variety of choices can be beneficial as it gives the feasibility to select what we want. Despite this, it can also cause confusion which can lead to chaos
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Choice
is a freedom which every person possesses. It is
widely
claimed that there are numerous
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
options
to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
choose
from. This trend is an advantage as we can
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
choose
from a wide range of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
options
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
it can cause confusion.

On the one hand, when a human being is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
an umpteen number of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
choices
, their mind will be in a state of perplexity which may lead to chaos. They will not have a proper objective to select what they intended to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
end
up with something which is useless. To illustrate this, a research study conducted by the
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"
University of Wales
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"
in the United Kingdom
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
shows
that the 90% of humans will
be baffled
when the number of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
choices
increases.

On the other hand
, the variety should be an attribute of buying an excellent product. If we have a wide range of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
options
, we will be able to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
choose
what is best for us.
For example
, buying a mobile phone can be a tedious job,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
when we
are provided
with
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
options
according to its specifications, the task becomes easier and productive.
In addition
to this,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
choices
in career path have proliferated over the years, which facilitates the students to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
choose
what they intend to pursue. In a recent survey conducted by the
Use a smart opening quote here: "“".
"
Times
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Now
Use a smart closing quote here: "”".
"
magazine
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
shows
that the number of career
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
choices
multiplied from 2000 to 2010 and it proves its efficiency at 90% of the students
are satisfied
with it.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
In
conclusions, variety of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
choices
can be beneficial as it gives the feasibility to select what we want. Despite this, it can
also
cause confusion which can lead to
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chaos
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
Learning another language is not only learning different words for the same things, but learning another way to think about things.
Flora Lewis

IELTS essay Face-to-face communication is better than other types of communication such as letters, email, or telephone calls. How far you agree or disagree with this statement? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
275 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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