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TOEFL Integrated speaking, question 5 - The speakers discuss two possible solutions to the woman’s problem. Describe the problem and the two solutions. Then explain what you think the woman should do and why. - Preparation Time: 20 SecondsResponse v.2

TOEFL Integrated speaking, question 5 - The speakers discuss two possible solutions to the woman’s problem. Describe the problem and the two solutions. Then explain what you think the woman should do and why. - Preparation Time: 20 SecondsResponse v. 2
Certain individuals believe that the younger generations can learn a foreign language more easily as compared to grown-up people. This essay agrees with the aforementioned statement as children have a strong grasping power as compared to adults and they can learn a new dialect more easily. Young generation has a strong learning power, they are more capable of learning a new vocabulary and that too at a much faster pace. This is to say, children are not busy the entire day as a result, they can spend hours in studying the grammar, pronunciation and vocabulary of a foreign language. Moreover, research shows that children mind in their growing ages are more capable of learning new things, thus, it is easy for them to acquire the knowledge and skills of foreign dialect. To elucidate, a recent report conducted by The Times showed that 80 percent of children are faster learners as compared to adults and they are able to master a new language. However some individuals believe that adults, though given the opportunity to learn a foreign language will not be able to complete it successfully. In other words, mature people have innumerable priorities such as jobs, taking care of family and children, cooking food and grocery shopping, thus, they do not have the time to spend long hours in learning a new dialect. To exemplify, many online and evening foreign language courses have been organised for adults, but tired from their work they are not able to concentrate on studies To conclude, adults are less capable of learning a new language as compared to children. In my opinion, I vehemently agree that it is much easier for a child to absorbs the basic of new language as compared to adults
Certain individuals believe that the younger generations can learn a
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foreign
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language
more
easily
as compared to grown-up
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people
. This essay
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agrees
with the aforementioned statement as
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children
have a strong grasping power as compared to
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adults and
they can learn a
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new
dialect more
easily
.

Young generation has a strong
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learning
power, they are more capable of
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learning
a
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new
vocabulary and that too at a much faster pace. This is to say,
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children
are not busy the entire day
as a result
, they can spend hours in studying the grammar, pronunciation and vocabulary of a
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foreign
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language
.
Moreover
, research
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shows
that
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children
mind in their growing ages are more capable of
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learning
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new
things,
thus
, it is easy for them to acquire the knowledge and
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skills
of
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foreign
dialect. To elucidate, a recent report conducted by The Times
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
showed
that 80 percent of
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children
are faster learners as compared to
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
adults and
they are able to master a
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new
language.

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However
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some
individuals believe that
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adults
, though
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given
the opportunity to learn a
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foreign
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language
will not be able to complete it
successfully
.
In other words
, mature
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people
have innumerable priorities such as jobs, taking care of family and
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children
, cooking food and grocery shopping,
thus
, they do not have the time to spend long hours in
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learning
a
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new
dialect. To exemplify,
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many
online and evening
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foreign
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language
courses have been
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organised
for
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adults
,
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but
tired from their work they are not able to concentrate on
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studies


To conclude
,
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adults
are less capable of
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learning
a
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new
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language
as compared to
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children
. In my opinion, I
vehemently
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agree
that it is much easier for a child to absorbs the basic of
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new
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language
as compared to
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adults
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay TOEFL Integrated speaking, question 5 - The speakers discuss two possible solutions to the woman’s problem. Describe the problem and the two solutions. Then explain what you think the woman should do and why. - Preparation Time: 20 SecondsResponse v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
289 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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