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TOEFL Integrated speaking, question 5 - The speakers discuss two possible solutions to the woman’s problem. Briefly summarize the problem. Then sate which solution you recommend and explain why. - Preparation Time: 20 SecondsResponse Time: v.1

TOEFL Integrated speaking, question 5 - The speakers discuss two possible solutions to the woman’s problem. Briefly summarize the problem. Then sate which solution you recommend and explain why. - Preparation Time: 20 SecondsResponse Time: v. 1
Admittedly, students importance of home based learning has grown up. Some people believe that it is more effective than academic learning. This essay delves into why home-based learning better than campus learning. To begin with, individual learning more convenient than curriculum education. To be precise, people get more learning materials from the internet and also they do not feel any teachers pressure. Furthermore, easily access topics from University website. For example, the latest survey of Boston University reveals that nowadays different subject related applications available in Play Store and almost 60percentage of students studying with the support of this application. Hence, it goes without saying that self study more convenient than classroom learning. Moving on, self education method less costly than classroom study. To be clearer, in this present Era the study materials freely available in internet and travelling expenses not required. However, a pupil studying in school those students necessary to buy learning materials from the store and they also will pay the Travelling fee. For instance, the internet has different subject related websites and online classes only one laptop necessary for self-learning, but the classroom learning entirely different than self-study. Indeed, the student needs different subject related books and materials. Thus, it can be stated that the classroom learning more costly than self study. On the other hand, school-based learning develops different skills like leadership quality, organizational skills and communication skill. Additionally, the pupil gets more chances to mingle with others. Even if it is so the argument neither robust nor logical when compared with the multifarious benefits offered by the modern self study methods. To conclude, it can be irrefutable stated that self learning much more effective way of learning as compared to the school education. It is hoped that the authorities would concentrate more on such study method which will help students for an easy learning.
Admittedly
,
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students
importance of home based
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learning
has grown up.
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Some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
believe that it is more effective than academic
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learning
. This essay delves into why home-based
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learning
better than campus learning.

To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
begin
with, individual
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learning
more convenient than curriculum education. To be precise,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
more
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learning
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materials
from the internet and
also
they do not feel any teachers pressure.
Furthermore
,
easily
access topics from University website.
For example
, the latest survey of Boston University reveals that nowadays
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
different
subject related applications available in Play Store and almost 60percentage of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
studying with the support of this application.
Hence
, it goes without saying that self
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
study
more convenient than classroom learning.

Moving on, self education method less costly than classroom
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
study
. To be clearer, in this present Era the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
study
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
materials
freely
available in internet and travelling expenses not required.
However
, a pupil studying in school those
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students
necessary to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learning
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
materials
from the
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
store and
they
also
will pay the Travelling fee.
For instance
, the internet has
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different
subject related websites and online classes
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
one laptop necessary for self-learning,
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but
the classroom
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learning
entirely
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different
Did you mean 'different "from"? 'Different than' is often considered colloquial style.
than
self-study.
Indeed
, the
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student
needs
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different
subject related books and
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materials
.
Thus
, it can
be stated
that the classroom
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learning
more costly than self study.

On the other hand
, school-based
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learning
develops
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different
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
like leadership quality, organizational
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
and communication
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skill
.
Additionally
, the pupil
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
gets
more chances to mingle with others. Even if it is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
the argument neither robust nor logical when compared with the multifarious benefits offered by the modern self
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
study
methods.

To conclude
, it can be irrefutable stated that self
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learning
much more effective way of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learning
as compared to the school education. It
is hoped
that the authorities would concentrate more on such
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
study
method which will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
for an easy
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learning
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay TOEFL Integrated speaking, question 5 - The speakers discuss two possible solutions to the woman’s problem. Briefly summarize the problem. Then sate which solution you recommend and explain why. - Preparation Time: 20 SecondsResponse Time: v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
310 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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