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TOEFL Integrated speaking, question 5 - The speakers discuss two possible solutions to the man’s problem. Briefly summarize the problem. Then sate which solution you recommend and explain why. - Preparation Time: 20 SecondsResponse Time: v.1

TOEFL Integrated speaking, question 5 - The speakers discuss two possible solutions to the man’s problem. Briefly summarize the problem. Then sate which solution you recommend and explain why. - Preparation Time: 20 SecondsResponse Time: v. 1
Orthodox and traditional type of medicine have become vastly used in modern society. It is generally believed that for these methods of cure to be effective, patients most exhibit positive mental attributes towards it. From an individual perspective, I ultimately agree with the opinion that psychological behaviour of clients towards treatment can not be overlooked. This essay will argue in favour of the motion. Firstly, willingness to understand medication regimen will hasty well-being. Major difficulties in successful treatment of sick clients arise from compliance problem, which vary from mal compliance, non-compliance to over compliance. The argument is, a person in good mental condition would strive to adhere strictly to the routine. Take schizophrenia as an example, relatives of the affected person must be present to ensure drugs are taken religiously else all effort will fail. Secondly, happiness is a state of mind. Determination to live will increase the chances of successful treatment. For example, people with suicidal tendencies might refuse care on admission to the hospital. Until the underlying problem is tackled, any attempt to avert further occurrence would be futile. In addition, traditional treatment in particular, is closely associated with the faith of the victim. This is why placebo effect can be felt by the patient without scientific explanation to back it up. For instance, in phantom pain, the sufferer already had the mindset that he/she is going through an unimaginable discomfort, service provider can easily administer counterfeit medication to calm the situation which will be effective for the relive of pain. In conclusion, entire public need to learn the effect of good behaviour towards treatment in other for it to achieve the desirable effect. Meaning, a positive state of mind is tantamount to successful care.
Orthodox and traditional type of medicine have become
vastly
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
in modern society. It is
generally
believed that for these methods of cure to be effective, patients most exhibit
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
mental attributes towards it. From an individual perspective, I
ultimately
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
with the opinion that psychological
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behaviour
of clients towards
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treatment
can not
be overlooked
. This essay will argue in
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favour
of the motion.

Firstly
, willingness to understand medication regimen will hasty well-being. Major difficulties in successful
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
treatment
of sick clients arise from compliance problem, which vary from
Possible spelling mistake found.
mal
compliance, non-compliance to over compliance. The argument is, a person in
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
mental condition would strive to adhere
strictly
to the routine. Take schizophrenia as an example, relatives of the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
affected
person
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
be present to ensure drugs
are taken
religiously
else all effort will fail.

Secondly
, happiness is a state of mind. Determination to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
will increase the chances of successful
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
treatment
.
For example
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
with suicidal tendencies might refuse care on admission to the hospital. Until the underlying problem
is tackled
, any attempt to avert
further
occurrence would be futile.

In addition
, traditional
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
treatment
in particular
, is
closely
associated with the faith of the victim. This is why placebo effect can
be felt
by the patient without scientific explanation to back it up.
For instance
, in phantom pain, the sufferer already had the mindset that he/she is going through an unimaginable discomfort, service provider can
easily
administer counterfeit medication to calm the situation which will be effective for
After 'the', do not use a verb. Make sure that the spelling of 'relive' is correct. If 'relive' is the first word in a compound adjective, use a hyphen between the two words. Note: This error message can occur if you use a verb as a noun, and the word is not a noun in standard English.
the relive
of pain.

In conclusion
, entire public need to learn the effect of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
Possible spelling mistake. 'behaviour' is British English.
behaviour
towards
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
treatment
in other for it to achieve the desirable effect. Meaning, a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
state of mind is tantamount to successful care.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay TOEFL Integrated speaking, question 5 - The speakers discuss two possible solutions to the man’s problem. Briefly summarize the problem. Then sate which solution you recommend and explain why. - Preparation Time: 20 SecondsResponse Time: v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
287 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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