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TOEFL Integrated speaking, question 4 - Using the example of the car advertisement, explain what is meant by implicit memory. - Preparation Time: 30 SecondsResponse Time: 60 Seconds v.1

TOEFL Integrated speaking, question 4 - Using the example of the car advertisement, explain what is meant by implicit memory. - Preparation Time: 30 SecondsResponse Time: 60 Seconds v. 1
In this modern time, the security of people has become a serious concern as many people feel unsafe not only at home but also in public places. The main reason for this insecurity is the surge in criminal activities by unemployed youngsters and one key solution to this problem is the generation of employment opportunities by the government. Owing to an increase in criminal offences by many youngsters, people now feel insecure wherever they are. This is because most of the young people remain unemployed even after qualifying for higher degrees, which makes harder for them to earn bread and butter for their families. As a consequence, they tread on a wrong path to earn money and usually threaten the general public by snatching their money, mobile phones and gold ornaments. For instance, according to a survey by the 'Time' in Gurgaon, out of one thousand cases of snatching reported in 2018, 40% were committed by young people with no job in hand. Thus, this creates a fear among the people due to which they feel unsafe. To combat this overindulgence of young generation in delinquencies, the government should generate various job opportunities. With the increase in the number of jobs in diverse sectors such as mechanical, electrical, computer and chemical, the youth will get work according to their qualification. As a result, they will not perform any unethical actions to earn money. To exemplify, in Chandigarh, after introducing ample jobs by authorities in the area of information technology for the graduates a 60% decline in the crime rate has been observed since the last 2 years. Therefore, if the government provides employment to the degree holders, then the crime rate will definitely decrease and this world will become a safe place to live in. In conclusion, people feel less safe today as a result of increased offences by unemployed youth. To remedy this problem, the government should create more employment for them.
In this modern time, the security of
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people
has become a serious concern as
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many
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people
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feel
unsafe not
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only
at home
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but
also
in public places. The main reason for this insecurity is the surge in criminal activities by unemployed youngsters and one key solution to this problem is the generation of employment opportunities by the
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government
.

Owing to an increase in criminal
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offences
by
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many
youngsters,
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people
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now
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feel
insecure wherever they are. This is
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because
most of the young
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people
remain unemployed even after qualifying for higher degrees, which
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makes
harder for them to earn bread and butter for their families. As a consequence, they tread on a
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wrong
path to earn money and
usually
threaten the
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general public
by snatching their money, mobile phones and gold ornaments.
For instance
, according to a survey by the 'Time' in Gurgaon, out of one thousand cases of snatching reported in 2018, 40%
were committed
by young
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people
with no
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job
in hand.
Thus
, this creates a fear among the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
due to which they
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
feel
unsafe.

To combat this overindulgence of young generation in delinquencies, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should generate various
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
job
opportunities. With the increase in the number of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
jobs
in diverse sectors such as mechanical, electrical, computer and chemical, the youth will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
work according to their qualification.
As a result
, they will not perform any unethical actions to earn money. To exemplify, in Chandigarh, after introducing ample
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
jobs
by authorities in the area of information technology for the graduates a 60% decline in the crime rate has
been observed
since the last 2 years.
Therefore
, if the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
provides employment to the degree holders, then the crime rate will definitely decrease and this world will become a safe place to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
in.

In conclusion
,
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people
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feel
less safe
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today
as a result
of increased
Possible spelling mistake. 'offences' is British English.
offences
by unemployed youth. To remedy this problem, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should create more employment for them.
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IELTS essay TOEFL Integrated speaking, question 4 - Using the example of the car advertisement, explain what is meant by implicit memory. - Preparation Time: 30 SecondsResponse Time: 60 Seconds v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
323 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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