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247 are there any occasions when reading at speed is a useful skill to have? what are they? v.1

247 are there any occasions when reading at speed is a useful skill to have? what are they? v. 1
Children from a rich family background do not deal well with the hardships in adult life in comparison with those who have a mediocre family background during their childhood days. I completely agree with this idea and opinion because the children from a poor family have good time management skill and also have a better emotional quotient in life. Firstly, these children with less money tend to be happy with what they have at present and so do not expect a lot from their parents. Moreover, they do not live in a big house or a mansion with separate rooms but live in a small hut. Despite of these poor facilities they live happily with their family without complaining about them. For example, the children without a lot of money travel mostly by bicycle and public transports from their childhood, so they would not find it difficult to travel in their adult life compared to the wealthy children. The next important reason for me to agree with this opinion is that they are better with time management and money management skills. These children help their parents to overcome the financial burden by doing local errands for money which help them to manage time in adult life. For instance, perhaps during their childhood days they help their parents with the household work, after they are finished with school. Furthermore, middle class children tend to work part time in their neighbourhoods to help their family financially. In conclusion, children with a middle class background have better management skills which are crucial for facing adult life. Unlike the children with wealthy parents, they have a better emotional stability to deal with the problems of adulthood.
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from a rich
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background do not deal well with the hardships in adult
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life
in comparison
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family
background during their childhood days. I completely
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because
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children
from a poor
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family
have
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good
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time
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management
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skill
and
also
have a
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better
emotional quotient in life.

Firstly
, these
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children
with less
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money
tend to be happy with what they have at present and
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so
do not
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expect
a lot from their
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parents
.
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, they do not
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live
in a
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big
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house
or a mansion with separate rooms
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but
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live
in a
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these poor facilities they
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happily
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family
without complaining about them.
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children
without
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money
travel
mostly
by bicycle and public transports from their childhood,
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so
they would not find it difficult to travel in their adult
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life
compared to the wealthy children.

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next
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reason for me to
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agree
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better
with
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time
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management
and
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money
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management
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skills
. These
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children
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help
their
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parents
to overcome the financial burden by doing local errands for
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money
which
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help
them to manage
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time
in adult
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life
.
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, perhaps during their childhood days they
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help
their
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parents
with the household work, after they
are finished
with school.
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, middle
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class
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children
tend to work part
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time
in their
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neighbourhoods
to
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help
their
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family
financially
.

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,
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children
with a middle
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class
background have
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better
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management
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skills
which are crucial for facing adult
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life
. Unlike the
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children
with wealthy
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parents
, they have a
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better
emotional stability to deal with the problems of adulthood.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
Change your language and you change your thoughts.
Karl Albrecht

IELTS essay 247 are there any occasions when reading at speed is a useful skill to have? what are they? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
282 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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