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Question 4: Using the example of the car advertisement, explain what is meant by implicit memory. v.1

Question 4: Using the example of the car advertisement, explain what is meant by implicit memory. v. 1
As the business world is becoming more and more competitive and cutthroat, business leaders examine various ways to encourage their employees. One of these methods is to commensurate salaries based on the employees’ level of productivity and sales. I believe that carrying out such a method can benefit both employees and employers, despite having some negative aspects and consequences. On the one hand, undeniably money plays an incredibly vital role in our lives; therefore, it can be deduced that monetary rewards and payments can be great motivators. When employees were assured that their diligence and hard work would be handsomely paid, they almost certainly would dedicate their considerable effort and primary attention to accomplishing their tasks and assignments, which means higher productivity. Moreover, the higher performance of the employees results in greater profit yielded by organizations. Consequently, adopting this method would be a win-win game for both sides (employers and employees). On the other hand, those who hold a skeptical view of this motivational technique think this method is not accurate nor fair. For instance, assessing the productivity of some employees such as teachers is utterly difficult - if not impossible. Worse yet, such a salary determination system is bound to be inaccurate or fail when measuring the amount of productivity of all individuals working in a unit. Accordingly, from the efficacy and ethic perspective, using this method is questionable. To conclude, I subscribe to the view that paying salaries according to employees’ performance not only can motivate and stimulate them to become more productive but also can be beneficial for businesses; nonetheless, the downside is that this method neither is precise or just.
As the business world is becoming more and more competitive and cutthroat, business leaders examine various ways to encourage their
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employees
. One of these
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methods
is to commensurate salaries based on the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
employees’
level of
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productivity
and sales. I believe that carrying out such a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
method
can benefit both
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employees
and employers, despite having
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some
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negative
aspects and consequences.

On the one hand,
undeniably
money plays an
incredibly
vital role in our
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lives
;
therefore
, it can
be deduced
that monetary rewards and payments can be great motivators. When
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employees
were assured
that their diligence and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
work would be
handsomely
paid, they almost
certainly
would dedicate their considerable effort and primary attention to accomplishing their tasks and assignments, which means higher
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
productivity
.
Moreover
, the higher performance of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
employees
results in greater profit yielded by organizations.
Consequently
, adopting this
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method
would be a win-win game for both sides (employers and employees).

On the other hand
, those who hold a skeptical view of this motivational technique
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
this
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method
is not accurate nor
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
fair
.
For instance
, assessing the
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productivity
of
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
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employees
such as teachers is
utterly
difficult
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-
if not impossible. Worse
yet
, such a salary determination system
is bound
to be inaccurate or fail when measuring the amount of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
productivity
of all individuals working in a unit.
Accordingly
, from the efficacy and ethic perspective, using this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
method
is questionable.

To conclude
, I subscribe to the view that paying salaries according to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
employees’
performance not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
can motivate and stimulate them to become more productive
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but
also
can be beneficial for businesses; nonetheless, the downside is that this
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method
neither is precise
Use "nor" with neither.
or
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay Question 4: Using the example of the car advertisement, explain what is meant by implicit memory. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
274 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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