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Speaking topic in text: TPO 02 - Question 2Some college students choose to take courses in a variety of subject areas in order to get a broad education. Others choose to focus on a single subject area in order to have a deeper understanding of that area. W v.1

Speaking topic in text: TPO 02 - Question 2Some college students choose to take courses in a variety of subject areas in order to get a broad education. Others choose to focus on a single subject area in order to have a deeper understanding of that area. W v. 1
Some people like to do the same thing over and over again and keep away from doing something new. Whereas, others believe in change being the best. In my opinion, the only thing constant is change and people should adapt to it. There are many people who don’t like to change the way they are working or doing something. They have their own routine at the same time, they get the same enjoyment doing it over and over again. To give you an example, a person who runs an inheritance business, tries to run the same way as their ancestor was doing it. Even after availability of new technology, they are running the business same way because people like their product and also owners feel pride and enjoy being doing the same way. But in the current world, there are very few examples of such people. On the other hand, due to the advancement of technology people have access to many information and they want to explore new things or try a different way of doing the same things. In this competitive world to sustain one’s business an individual has to come up with new ideas and try to differentiate themselves in order to gain market share. As a classic example, Nokia was pioneered in mobile phones in the late 1990s, but they fail to manage with the advancement of technology in early 2000s and stick to their traditional technology. As a result, within two years they came to bankruptcy from being once market leader. In conclusion, there are numerous people or organization who can’t adapt to changing environment and they like to do things as they are doing, but I feel that, in this technological era, one should adapt to change and try new things or at least do the same things differently to gain new experience.
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, others believe in
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being the best. In my opinion, the
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thing constant is
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and
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people
should adapt to it.

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people
who don’t like to
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change
the way they are working or
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doing
something. They have their
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own
routine at the same time, they
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get
the same enjoyment
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it
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over
and
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again. To give you an example, a person who runs an inheritance business, tries to run the same way as their ancestor was
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doing
it. Even after availability of
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new
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technology
, they are running the business same way
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because
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people
like their product and
also
owners feel pride and enjoy being
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doing
the same way.
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in the
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current
world, there are
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few examples of such
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people
.

On the other hand
, due to the advancement of
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technology
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people
have access to
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many information
and they want to explore
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new
things or try a
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different
way of
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doing
the same things. In this competitive world to sustain one’s business an individual
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has to
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come
up with
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new
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ideas
and try to differentiate themselves in order to gain market share. As a classic example, Nokia
was pioneered
in mobile phones in the late 1990s,
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but
they fail to manage with the advancement of
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technology
in early 2000s and stick to their traditional
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technology
.
As a result
, within two years they came to bankruptcy from being once
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market
leader.

In conclusion
, there are numerous
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people
or organization who can’t adapt to changing
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environment and
they like to do things as they are
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doing
,
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but
I feel that, in this technological era, one should adapt to
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change
and try
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new
things or at least do the same things
differently
to gain
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new
experience.
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IELTS essay Speaking topic in text: TPO 02 - Question 2Some college students choose to take courses in a variety of subject areas in order to get a broad education. Others choose to focus on a single subject area in order to have a deeper understanding of that area. W v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
308 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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