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TOEFL essay: Some people believe that university students should be required to attend classes. Others believe that going to classes should be optional for students. Which point of view do you agree with? Use specific reasons and details to. . . v.2

TOEFL essay: Some people believe that university students should be required to attend classes. Others believe that going to classes should be optional for students. Which point of view do you agree with? Use specific reasons and details to. . . v. 2
First of all, learning in a traditional class make you more social. Even though some people find old teaching style old fashioned, students become much more social by the attending classes regularly. They meet with each others, agrue about some lectures and shares ideas. It is a kind of prepareation for proffesional business life. Secondly, school is a obligation if you want to learn something new. Students who in a stage acquaring new knowlegde should study more in order to reach their goals an potential. Listening the teacher steadily increase their motivation and boosts their success. Thirdly, if students attend the classes they can guess what question will be ask on the exams. Actually, teachers sometimes give clues about exams during the lecture. Listening the teacher in a silent environment and taking note may be helpful for students. Furthermore, even some students take voice record of lectures and listen it over and over. To wrap it up, taking all aforementioned reasons into the account, one can conclude that student should come to the class to get new ideas. It is not only help to broad their horizon, but also gives the key of being success in the exams.
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First of all
, learning in a traditional
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class
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make
you more social.
Even though
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some
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people
find
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old
teaching style
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old fashioned
,
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students
become much more social by the attending
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classes
regularly
. They
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meet
with each
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others
,
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agrue
about
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some
lectures and shares
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ideas
. It is a kind of
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prepareation
for
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proffesional
business life.

Secondly
, school is
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a
obligation if you want to learn something new.
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Students
who in a stage
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acquaring
new
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knowlegde
should study more in order to reach their goals
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an
potential. Listening the teacher
steadily
increase their motivation and boosts their success.

Thirdly
, if
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students
attend the
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classes
they can guess what question will be
Consider using a past participle here: "asked".
ask
on the exams. Actually, teachers
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sometimes
give clues about exams during the lecture. Listening the teacher in a silent environment and taking note may be helpful for
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students
.
Furthermore
, even
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some
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students
take voice record of lectures and listen it over and over.

To wrap it up, taking all aforementioned reasons into the account, one can conclude that
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student
should
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come
to the
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class
to
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get
new
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ideas
. It is not
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only
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help
to broad their horizon,
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but
also
gives the key of being success in the exams.
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11Mistakes

IELTS essay TOEFL essay: Some people believe that university students should be required to attend classes. Others believe that going to classes should be optional for students. Which point of view do you agree with? Use specific reasons and details to. . . v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
198 words
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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