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Please briefly state your scientific and professional interests and objectives, as well as your career goals. Include a description of your past accomplishments that are not evident from the examination of other documents submitted. Report your results, i v.2

Please briefly state your scientific and professional interests and objectives, as well as your career goals. Include a description of your past accomplishments that are not evident from the examination of other documents submitted. Report your results, i v. 2
Researching is one of the most things I fascinate in my life. In high school period, both Physics and Chemistry are my forte and also my favorite subjects. I participated two times in the Excellent Student Contest in Chemistry in Ho Chi Minh City and was awarded the First prize and Second Prize. Besides, I usually went to Physics Lab and Chemistry Lab in my high school to observe the way my teachers do experiments, which is really amazing to me. In my freshmen time in Ho Chi Minh University of Technology, I joined a small group with my close friend to compete in Chemical Engineering Contest and we were proudly received a Consolation Prize for the idea of manufacturing cheap and eco-friendly pH indicator from red cabbage. After that Contest, I try my best to being admitted to Honors Class, which only adopted high ranking student and was taught in both English and Vietnamese. With the higher requirement, this class boosted my competency and gave me more chance to do research. Being a researcher in nano technology is my goal in future and I aim to investigate more about Nano particles or the way to apply it in practices. Throughout undergraduate period, almost my time is to do research thesis in Catalysis laboratory about Hollow nano-spheres particle, which is an innovative material employed to delivery drug to treat cancer in specific tissues. This research was done only by me and the only support I have was the advice of my advisor and seniors. I was struggled with this for a long time in virtue of not collecting any successful data and my advisor suggested that I should change into a simpler research. However, eventually, I synthesized it successfully and was given excellent score for my thesis. Basing on this research, I published a scientific paper in ‘The Regional Conference on Chemical Engineering’ last October. I consider a plethora of scholarships before applying for TIGP, but I think that only TIGP is suitable for my career path since Taiwan is the most livable country and has a great culture and cuisine. Additionally, I was also strongly advised by my lecturer who got her PhD in National Taiwan University of Science and Technology. If I was admitted to TIGP, I would continue to research more about innovative materials and nurture my passion in Nano Technology. The applications of nano-materials are really merit for the humankinds encompass improving curability for cancers or enhance the manufacturing process and that is the reason why I pursue it. If possible, I want to be a post-doctoral in Taiwan or another country to become a truly researcher who could fire student’s enthusiasm in developing country to keep their passion about science like me.
Researching is one of the most things I fascinate in my life. In high school period, both Physics and Chemistry are my forte and
also
my favorite subjects. I participated two
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times
in the Excellent Student Contest in Chemistry in Ho Chi Minh City and
was awarded
the
First
prize and Second Prize.
Besides
, I
usually
went to Physics Lab and Chemistry Lab in my high school to observe the way my teachers do experiments, which is
really
amazing to me. In my freshmen
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
in Ho Chi Minh University of
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Technology
, I
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joined
a
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small
group with my close friend to compete in Chemical Engineering
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Contest and
we were
proudly
received a Consolation Prize for the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
of manufacturing
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
cheap
and eco-friendly pH indicator from red cabbage. After that Contest, I try my best to
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being
admitted to Honors
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Class
, which
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only
adopted high ranking student and
was taught
in both English and Vietnamese. With the higher requirement, this
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
class
boosted my competency and gave me more chance to do research.

Being a researcher in nano
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technology
is my goal in future and I aim to investigate more about
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Nano
particles or the way to apply it in practices. Throughout undergraduate period, almost my
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time
is to do
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research
thesis in Catalysis laboratory about Hollow
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nano-spheres
particle, which is an innovative material employed to delivery drug to treat cancer in specific tissues. This
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research
was done
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only
by me and the
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only
support I have was the advice of my advisor and seniors. I
was struggled
with this for a long
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time
in virtue of not collecting any successful data and my advisor suggested that I should
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
into a simpler
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research
.
However
,
eventually
, I synthesized it
successfully
and was
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given
excellent score for my thesis. Basing on this
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research
, I published a scientific paper in ‘The Regional Conference on Chemical Engineering’ last October.

I consider a plethora of scholarships
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before
applying for
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TIGP
,
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but
I
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think
that
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only
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TIGP
is suitable for my career path since Taiwan is the most livable country and has a great culture and cuisine.
Additionally
, I was
also
strongly
advised by my lecturer who
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
her PhD in National Taiwan University of Science and
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Technology
. If I
was admitted
to
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TIGP
, I would continue to
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research
more about innovative materials and nurture my passion in
Possible spelling mistake found.
Nano
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Technology
. The applications of
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nano-materials
are
really
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merit
for the
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humankinds
encompass improving curability for cancers or enhance the manufacturing process and
that is
the reason why I pursue it. If possible, I want to be a post-doctoral in Taiwan or another country to become a
You used an adverb ('truly') instead of an adjective, or a noun ('researcher') instead of another adjective.
truly researcher
who could fire student’s enthusiasm in
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
developing country
to
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keep
their passion about science like me.
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17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Please briefly state your scientific and professional interests and objectives, as well as your career goals. Include a description of your past accomplishments that are not evident from the examination of other documents submitted. Report your results, i v. 2

Essay
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3 paragraphs
457 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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