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TOEFL essay: People learn in different ways. Some people learn by doing things; other people learn by reading about things; others learn by listening to people talk about things. Which of these methods of learning is best? Use specific examples. . v.1

TOEFL essay: People learn in different ways. Some people learn by doing things; other people learn by reading about things; others learn by listening to people talk about things. Which of these methods of learning is best? Use specific examples. . v. 1
Over recent years, human beings spend lesser time at their dwellings. As humans are social animal, they prefer to spend time out with colleagues or friends or get involved in face to face communications. However, this leads to problems such as stress and anxiety. Human is a social animal and he or she needs interaction with others. The availability of online interaction with technological advances does not satisfy those which have realized the importance of physical interaction. Researches suggest that online interaction is not a solution in the sense of loneliness, but they also have reported that people use social network sites to make friends who can be met in person. In addition, the high level of loneliness decreases when those who suffer from it escape from the home surrounded by walls. Therefore, the duration of time spent at home has seen a decline. Lack of time spent at home comes with both personal and societal problems. Those who want to get rid of the sense of loneliness can have high-level stress and anxiety in crowded areas. Especially, noisy places may trigger anxiety in individuals. In addition, people who spend excessive time out of home exposure the higher level of pollution than those who do not and this exposure leads to health issues like asthma, heart-related problems including bronchitis. Moreover, the increase in the number of people spending time outside creates pollution problems because this trend leads to noise, air, and environmental pollution. In conclusion, the people of today prefer to spend less time at home as a result of the lack of interaction. The physical desire for physical interaction is push people to go out of the borders of home today. Althoughgoing outside and engaged in crowded activities looks like an effective solution to the satisfaction of that desire, spending excessive time outside can likely cause stress-related problems and also environmental problems
Over recent years, human beings
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spend
lesser
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time
at their dwellings. As humans are social animal, they prefer to
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spend
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time
out with colleagues or friends or
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get
involved in face to face communications.
However
, this leads to
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problems
such as
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stress
and anxiety.

Human is a social
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animal and
he or she needs
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interaction
with others. The availability of online
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interaction
with technological advances does not satisfy those which have realized the importance of physical
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interaction
. Researches suggest that online
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interaction
is not a solution in the sense of loneliness,
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but
they
also
have reported that
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people
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use
social network sites to
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make
friends
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who
can
be met
in person.
In addition
, the high level of loneliness decreases when those
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who
suffer from it escape from the home surrounded by walls.
Therefore
, the duration of
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time
spent at home

has
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seen
a decline.

Lack of
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time
spent at home
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comes
with both personal and societal
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problems
. Those
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who
want to
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get
rid of the sense of loneliness can have high-level
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stress
and anxiety in crowded areas.
Especially
, noisy places may trigger anxiety in individuals.
In addition
,
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people
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who
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spend
excessive
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time
out of home exposure the higher level of pollution than those
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who
do not and this exposure leads to health issues like asthma, heart-related
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problems
including bronchitis.
Moreover
, the increase in the number of
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people
spending
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time
outside creates pollution
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problems
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because
this trend leads to noise, air, and environmental pollution.

In conclusion
, the
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people
of
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today
prefer to
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spend
less
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time
at home
as a result
of the lack of
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interaction
. The physical desire for physical
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interaction
is push
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people
to go out of the borders of home
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today
.
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Althoughgoing
outside and engaged in crowded activities looks like an effective solution to the satisfaction of that desire, spending excessive
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time
outside can likely cause
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stress
-related
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problems
and
also
environmental
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problems
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
34Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
If you talk to a man in a language he understands, that goes to his head. If you talk to him in his own language, that goes to his heart.
Nelson Mandela

IELTS essay TOEFL essay: People learn in different ways. Some people learn by doing things; other people learn by reading about things; others learn by listening to people talk about things. Which of these methods of learning is best? Use specific examples. . v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
312 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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