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People learn in different ways. Some people learn by doing things; other people learn by reading about things; others learn by listening to people talk about things. Which of these methods of learning is best for you? Use specific examples to support your v.1

People learn in different ways. Some people learn by doing things; other people learn by reading about things; others learn by listening to people talk about things. Which of these methods of learning is best for you? Use specific examples to support your v. 1
It has been argued that online teaching has rendered attending lectures obsolete. Many university students believe that lecturers are not essential and they can learn alone using resources available on the internet. However, I disagree with this assumption, and I think lectures are still an important way of learning because it can be interactive, save time and effort for students, and help them pass their examinations. Lectures allow students to interact with academics which are usually experts on their subjects. Therefore, students can engage in discussion and ask questions which facilitate their understanding. Furthermore, many universities have upgraded their lecturers to more active project-based ones. Students are expected to solve problems and communicate with their classmates. For instance, in my Master course, the lectures were engaging because the lecturer divided us into groups and ask us to solve problems, and present our solutions. Unfortunately, not all lectures are interactive, nor all lecturers are engaging. In addition, attending lectures can save time and effort because lecturers present the topic in a simplified manner which facilitate learning. Students who decide not attend the lecturers would need more time to read and absorb the materials. Moreover, they would miss important information mentioned in the class which are not in available in other reading sources. This may affect their performance in examinations. Studies have shown that students who do not miss their lectures are more likely to have better grades. To conclude, despite the advance in teaching technology and the availability of online courses, lectures are still an effective teaching tool in academia particularly modern interactive lectures.
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been argued
that online teaching has rendered attending
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obsolete.
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they can learn alone using resources available on the internet.
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think
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are
still
an
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important
way of learning
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because
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students
, and
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help
them pass their examinations.

Lectures
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allow
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students
to interact with academics which are
usually
experts on their subjects.
Therefore
,
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students
can engage in discussion and ask questions which facilitate their understanding.
Furthermore
,
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many
universities have upgraded their
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lecturers
to more active project-based ones.
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are
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expected
to solve problems and communicate with their classmates.
For instance
, in my Master course, the
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lectures
were engaging
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because
the
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lecturer
divided us into groups and ask us to solve problems, and present our solutions. Unfortunately, not all
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lectures
are interactive, nor all
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lecturers
are engaging.

In addition
, attending
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lectures
can save time and effort
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because
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lecturers
present the topic
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in a simplified manner
which facilitate learning.
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Students
who decide not attend the
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lecturers
would need more time to read and absorb the materials.
Moreover
, they would miss
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important
information mentioned in the
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class
which are not in available in other reading sources. This may affect their performance in examinations.

Studies have shown that
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students
who do not miss their
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lectures
are more likely to have better grades.

To conclude
, despite the advance in teaching technology and the availability of online courses,
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lectures
are
still
an effective teaching tool in academia
particularly
modern interactive
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lectures
.
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IELTS essay People learn in different ways. Some people learn by doing things; other people learn by reading about things; others learn by listening to people talk about things. Which of these methods of learning is best for you? Use specific examples to support your v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
263 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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