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some people believe that the best way of learning about life is by listening to the advice of family and friends. other people believe that the best way of learning about life is through personal experiences. compare the advantages of these two different v.1

some people believe that the best way of learning about life is by listening to the advice of family and friends. other people believe that the best way of learning about life is through personal experiences. compare the advantages of these two different v. 1
Performance enhancing drugs are really a matter of serious concern in today`s sports world. There are many reasons, due to which the sportsmen take illegal supplements. These supplements are detrimental for human health. They are taken by many persons in numerous ways just to boost their confidence and to attain name and fame. Firstly, everyone wants to be in top position, so they use a plethora of techniques and achieve success by taking illegal medicines and by practicing very little in a particular event. Athletes, nowadays, use shortcuts to achieve triumph rather than doing hard-work. Furthermore, for unfair advantages, like for ultra-endurance training, people take the aid of tablets, which facilitate them with unrealistic goals. For instance, some weight lifters take supplements like protein powder, just to make their body well-built quickly. However, these performance enhancing drugs affect the health of every person in the worst ways like they may end up with breaking of the tendon or their bodies may crash, after powerful and vigorous exercise. Some supplements are steroids, they can cause weight gain and can be harmful for the heart and liver as well. These drugs decline the significance of performance based skills and sports because the person who is on supplements can achieve big aims unlike by a person who does not take any such things and have average body. To conclude, the medicines, which improves performance in athletics, decrease the energy efficiency of the body. In addition, they give temporary success and happiness. So to have permanent contentment and victory, one must not take undue advantage of these drugs and should aim at realistic goals.
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reasons, due to which the sportsmen take illegal
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supplements
. These
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supplements
are detrimental for human health. They
are taken
by
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persons
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to boost their confidence and to attain name and fame.

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, everyone wants to be in top position,
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they
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use
a plethora of techniques and achieve success by taking illegal medicines and by practicing
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in a particular
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. Athletes, nowadays,
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use
shortcuts to achieve triumph
rather
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hard
-work.
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, for unfair advantages, like for ultra-endurance training,
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people
take the aid of tablets, which facilitate them with unrealistic goals.
For instance
,
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some
weight lifters take
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supplements
like protein powder,
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to
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make
their body well-built
quickly
.

However
, these
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performance
enhancing
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drugs
affect the health of every
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person
in the worst ways like they may
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end
up with breaking of the tendon or their bodies may crash, after powerful and vigorous exercise.
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Some
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supplements
are steroids, they can cause weight gain and can be harmful for the heart and liver
as well
. These
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drugs
decline the significance of
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performance
based
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skills
and sports
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because
the
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person
who is on
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supplements
can achieve
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big
aims unlike by a
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person
who does not take any such things and have average body.

To conclude
, the medicines, which
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improves
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performance
in athletics, decrease the energy efficiency of the body.
In addition
, they give temporary success and happiness.
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So
to have permanent contentment and victory, one
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must
not take undue advantage of these
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drugs
and should aim at realistic goals.
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IELTS essay some people believe that the best way of learning about life is by listening to the advice of family and friends. other people believe that the best way of learning about life is through personal experiences. compare the advantages of these two different v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
270 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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