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Today, travelers are traveling than ever before. Why is this the case? What are the benefits of traveling for the traveler? v.1

Today, travelers are traveling than ever before. Why is this the case? What are the benefits of traveling for the traveler? v. 1
Until fairly recently, it is noticed that voyagers are travelling than ever before. Globalization is the main reason for it, while there are several advantages of travelling. This essay will discuss causes of travelling followed benefits. To begin with, globalization is the major cause of travelling. The world has, become a global village, therefore, people are travelling overseas for education and to work. For Example, In India, there are many students who prefer to study abroad for higher studies like Post-graduation or MBA. Additionally, multinational companies like McDonald's, Sony and Reebok are expanding overseas, which is a professional reason for travelling. Moreover, travelling has become more affordable, hence influencing people to explore other parts of the countries within their budget. International travellers enjoy numerous advantages of travelling around the world. Firstly, knowing a different culture benefits a person to learn new things from it. For example, reported by The Times of India, people, who had visited Europe a year ago and adopted a new custom of planting trees such as Money Plant, Cactus in their rooms to curb air pollution. Secondly, People are now open to exploit more International opportunities in the field of education, thus after completion, they get well-paid jobs easily and a great lifestyle. Finally, traditions like Halloween and La Tomatina were unknown to many, but people all around the globe tempted to participate in it. In conclusion, people are frequently travelling overseas for business and education; travelling, however, benefitted them to get higher paid global jobs and learn their culture and traditions.
Until
fairly
recently, it
is noticed
that voyagers are
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travelling
than ever
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before
. Globalization is the main reason for it, while there are several advantages of
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travelling
. This essay will discuss causes of
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travelling
followed benefits.

To
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begin
with, globalization is the major cause of
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travelling
. The world has, become a global village,
therefore
,
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people
are
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travelling
overseas for education and to work.
For Example
, In India, there are
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many
students who prefer to study abroad for higher studies like Post-graduation or MBA.
Additionally
, multinational
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companies
like McDonald's, Sony and Reebok are expanding overseas, which is a professional reason for
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travelling
.
Moreover
,
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travelling
has become more affordable,
hence
influencing
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people
to explore other parts of the countries within their budget.

International
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travellers
enjoy numerous advantages of
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travelling
around the world.
Firstly
, knowing a
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different
culture benefits a person to learn new things from it.
For example
, reported by The Times of India,
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people
, who had visited Europe a year ago and adopted a new custom of planting trees such as Money Plant, Cactus in their rooms to curb air pollution.
Secondly
,
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People
are
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now
open to exploit more International opportunities in the field of education,
thus
after completion, they
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get
well-paid jobs
easily
and a great lifestyle.
Finally
, traditions like Halloween and La
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Tomatina
were unknown to
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many
,
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but
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people
all around the globe tempted to participate in it.

In conclusion
,
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people
are
frequently
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travelling
overseas for business and education;
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travelling
,
however
,
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benefitted
them to
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get
higher paid global jobs and learn their culture and traditions.
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Language is the road map of a culture. It tells you where its people come from and where they are going.
Rita Mae Brown

IELTS essay Today, travelers are traveling than ever before. Why is this the case? What are the benefits of traveling for the traveler? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
256 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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