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Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.6

Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. v. 6
These days the reason of rising sales of popular products is the result of advertisements that people watch on television or see on social media rather than buying products which are of necessity. In my opinion, the above statement is partially true as there are individuals who easily get influenced by advertisements, especially younger generation. On the contrary, there are people who keep track of their expenses and who do not believe in such advertisements. In today's digital world, there are various platforms to advertise ones product. There is - television, social media apps like Instagram and the Facebook. Youngsters, these days, spend lot of their time on mobile phones and hence are easily convinced by advertisements. Also, since the goods can be brought online convinently, it is easier to spend money on unnecessary things. Like, one of my friend buys clothes after she scrolls through a Myntra sponsered post on Instagram. If you see older generation, they have been taught, from childhood, the concept of saving. In addition, people who are in their 40s and above do not use their phones as much as younger adults and teenagers. Hence, they are less likely to get influenced by this kind of advertising. For instance, my father has been buying his clothes from Raymonds and still buys it from there without getting tempted by all the online ads. In conclusion, I somewhat agree that ever-rising sales of famous brands is power of advertising but not all people buy products being blinded by advertisements. Instead, such people buy products only if they are the need of the hour.
These days the reason of rising sales of popular
products
is the result of
advertisements
that
people
watch
on television or
see
on social media
rather
than buying
products
which are of necessity. In my opinion, the above statement is
partially
true as there are individuals
who
easily
get
influenced by
advertisements
,
especially
younger generation.
On the contrary
, there are
people
who
keep
track
of their expenses and
who
do not believe in such advertisements.

In
today
's digital world, there are various platforms to advertise
ones
product
. There is
-
television, social media apps like Instagram and the Facebook. Youngsters, these days, spend
lot of
their time on mobile phones and
hence
are
easily
convinced by
advertisements
.
Also
, since the
goods
can
be brought
online
convinently
, it is easier to spend money on unnecessary things. Like, one of my friend
buys
clothes after she scrolls through a
Myntra
sponsered
post on Instagram.

If you
see
older generation, they have
been taught
, from childhood, the concept of saving.
In addition
,
people
who
are in their 40s and above do not
use
their phones as much as younger adults and
teenagers
.
Hence
, they are less likely to
get
influenced by this kind of advertising.
For instance
, my father has been buying his clothes from
Raymonds
and
still
buys
it from there without getting tempted by all the online ads.

In conclusion
, I somewhat
agree
that ever-rising sales of
famous
brands is power of advertising
but
not all
people
buy
products
being blinded
by
advertisements
.
Instead
, such
people
buy
products
only
if they are the need of the hour.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
22Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
266 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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