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Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree or diagree? v.4

Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. v. 4
In the modern era, the advertising world spread all across the streams, and it has been covered each and every corner on the society. Since influence takes a major part in people's purchase, some have argued that the purchase of famous consumer product drive because of the influence of advertising to the actual requirement of the place where they are sold. I strongly agree with this view because advertising creates not only last longing impression in mind but also attract towards the purchase of the unessential products. First and foremost, an advertisement easily strikes into the mind of an individual and persist for a quite long period. For example, I, myself have come across in situations where I tend to buy products based on commercial impression or created mind memories rather than the actual need. This is because it creates an impression and when the same product found in the shopping mall or in online unintended purchase happen for the same. This is, therefore, one of the reasons for the purchase of products due to the effect of advertising. Moreover, advertising can present a product in such a way so peoples tend to buy those products without the actual need. The reason behind this is that in many cases advertising companies focus or create some target area of the society so that the product can create its own space regardless of the requirement. For instance, a hand sanitizer is not the actual need but because of its advertisement claims of abolishing 99% germs without washing hand with water have created an image that nowadays peoples buying it. Thus, a properly targeted advertisement can increase or even create a new consumer base for that product without worthy use. In conclusion, since commercials create a significant role in the purchase of any product, consumers are buying more and more unnecessary products due to its image created in mind and the way of product representations. The advertising industry is growing in such a pace that in future also, it will help to boost the sale of product one or another way.
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each and every corner on the society. Since influence takes a major part in
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famous
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drive
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because
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actual
requirement of the place where they
are sold
. I
strongly
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agree
with this view
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advertising
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not
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only
last longing impression in
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mind
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but
also
attract towards the
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purchase
of the unessential products.

First
and foremost, an advertisement
easily
strikes into the
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mind
of an individual and persist for a quite long period.
For example
, I, myself have
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come
across in situations where I tend to
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buy
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products
based on commercial impression or created
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mind
memories
rather
than the
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actual
need. This is
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because
it
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creates
an impression and when the same
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product
found in the shopping mall or in online unintended
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purchase
happen for the same. This is,
therefore
, one of the reasons for the
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purchase
of
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products
due to the effect of advertising.

Moreover
, advertising can present a
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product
in such a way
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so
peoples tend to
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buy
those
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products
without the
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actual
need. The reason behind this is that in
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many
cases advertising
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companies
focus or
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create
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some
target area of the society
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so
that the
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product
can
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create
its
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own
space regardless of the requirement.
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, a hand sanitizer is not the
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actual
need
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but
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because
of its advertisement claims of abolishing 99% germs without washing hand with water have created an image that nowadays peoples buying it.
Thus
, a
properly
targeted advertisement can increase or even
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create
a new consumer base for that
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product
without worthy
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use
.

In conclusion
, since commercials
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create
a significant role in the
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purchase
of any
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product
, consumers are buying more and more unnecessary
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products
due to its image created in
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mind
and the way of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
product
representations. The advertising industry is growing in such a pace that in future
also
, it will
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help
to boost the sale of
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product
one or another way.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
32Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
348 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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