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Today the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. v.27

Today the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. v. 27
With the ever-present concern for advertising commercial, its impacts on purchase decisions of consumers have been much debated recently. While many are of the opinion that advertisements boost the sales of goods and it also renders customers to opt for the unnecessary things, others disagree. I partly agree with the former viewpoint due to two main reasons which are examined in this essay. On the one hand, in the media, a product can be invested with great quality or feasible function. As a result, consumers tend to buy goods without enough consideration. This can be seen clearly that seniors are prone to attract the medicine with the especial function, therefore, they may buy its immediately after watching its advertising without the instruction from doctors. Thanks to advertising campaigns the revenue of various companies may increase rapidly. On the other hand, regardless of whether adverts are launched, the sales of certain goods are more likely unalterable. For example, certain goods with the luxury brands may be sold with the constant percentage in many years. This is because the price of these goods is far too high for everybody to own them. In these cases, therefore, consumers without high income are fluctuated slightly by advertisements. In conclusion, it is clear that adverts with numerous companies are the key to elevating the revenue but, few brands may be reversed. Customers are expected to take in consideration to opt for useful goods.
With the ever-present concern for advertising commercial, its impacts on
purchase
decisions of consumers have been much debated recently. While
many
are of the opinion that advertisements boost the sales of
goods
and it
also
renders customers to opt for the unnecessary things, others disagree. I partly
agree
with the former viewpoint due to two main reasons which
are examined
in this essay.

On the one hand, in the media, a product can
be invested
with great quality or feasible function.
As a result
, consumers tend to
buy
goods
without
enough
consideration. This can be
seen
clearly
that seniors are prone to attract the medicine with the especial function,
therefore
, they may
buy
its
immediately after watching its advertising without the instruction from doctors. Thanks to advertising campaigns the revenue of various
companies
may increase
rapidly
.

On the other hand
, regardless of whether adverts
are launched
, the sales of certain
goods
are more likely unalterable.
For example
, certain
goods
with the luxury brands may
be sold
with the constant percentage in
many
years. This is
because
the price of these
goods
is far too high for everybody to
own
them. In these cases,
therefore
, consumers without high income
are fluctuated
slightly
by advertisements.

In conclusion
, it is
clear
that adverts with numerous
companies
are the key to elevating the revenue
but
, few brands may
be reversed
. Customers are
expected
to take in consideration to opt for useful
goods
.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
6Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay Today the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. v. 27

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
238 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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