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Today the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. v.26

Today the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. v. 26
In this contemporary world, if the company wants to survive, they need income which can be brought by selling their goods. They use electronic media and newspapers as a medium of communication between them and consumers. It is also the responsibility of the consumers to think once or twice before buying the product for themselves. It is completely left to the customer opinion, as he has the right to choose. So, to some extent, I agree with the statement given in the question. Firstly, from company’s perspective side who makes the commodity, products are advertised everywhere on roads using flexies, the internet and other electronic media. They try to entice the customer by using cine stars, actress, singers to advertise their product or by giving special offers, weekend offers etc, rather than highlighting the quality of the product. Sometimes they do not show the drawbacks of the commodity such as the material used, warranty, durability etc. Some sales websites such as Flipkart, Amazon, snapdeal, try to attract customers. Secondly, from consumers’ perspective, customers have their own habits in buying the product. Only a few customers get attention towards product and their advertisement rather seeing the quality of the product and its Brand. Most of the customers do their own survey before buying items. Suppose if the person wants to buy a mobile, he compares the performance of the gadget with other gadgets, he takes ratings into consideration, experts view and from their opinion, he will buy the gadget. In addition to that, customers take the Brand into account and don't bother about any star acting in that advertisement. In conclusion, it is neither possible to blame the customer nor the advertisement. Advertisements act as one way to communicate with customers and get their opinion. But it is also the responsibility of consumers before buying the product and think whether it is useful to them or not. If they have enough income, doesn’t mean they spend it lavishly, irrespective of that everybody has the freedom to think. So use it appropriately.
In this contemporary world, if the
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company
wants to survive, they need income which can
be brought
by selling their
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goods
. They
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use
electronic media and newspapers as a medium of communication between them and
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consumers
. It is
also
the responsibility of the
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consumers
to
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think
once or twice
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before
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buying
the
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product
for themselves. It is completely
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left
to the
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customer
opinion, as he has the right to choose.
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So
, to
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some
extent, I
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agree
with the statement
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given
in the question.

Firstly
, from
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company
’s perspective side who
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makes
the commodity,
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products
are advertised
everywhere on roads using
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flexies
, the internet and other electronic media. They try to entice the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
customer
by using cine stars, actress, singers to advertise their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
product
or by giving special offers, weekend offers etc,
rather
than highlighting the quality of the
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product
.
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Sometimes
they do not
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show
the drawbacks of the commodity such as the material
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used
, warranty, durability etc.
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Some
sales websites such as Flipkart, Amazon,
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snapdeal
, try to attract customers.

Secondly
, from
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consumers’
perspective,
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customers
have their
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own
habits in
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buying
the
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product
.
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Only
a few
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customers
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get
attention towards
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product
and their advertisement
rather
seeing the quality of the
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product
and its Brand. Most of the
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customers
do their
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own
survey
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before
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buying
items. Suppose if the person wants to
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buy
a mobile, he compares the performance of the gadget with other gadgets, he takes ratings into consideration, experts view and from their opinion, he will
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buy
the gadget.
In addition
to that,
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customers
take the Brand into account and don't bother about any star acting in that advertisement.

In conclusion
, it is neither possible to blame the
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customer
nor the advertisement. Advertisements act as one way to communicate with
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customers
and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
their opinion.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
But
it is
also
the responsibility of
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consumers
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before
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
buying
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
product
and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
whether it is useful to them or not. If they have
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
enough
income, doesn’t mean they spend it
lavishly
, irrespective of that everybody has the freedom to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
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use
it
appropriately
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
24Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Today the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. v. 26

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
340 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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