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Today, the high sales of popular consumer good reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.3

Today, the high sales of popular consumer good reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. v. 3
Nowadays, the advertising is one of method that can be increased to grow sales of consumer goods and no longer real need of the society was sold. Personally, I agree with the statement. There are some reasons that be explained in the next paragraph. Firstly, the advertising is one of ways which is chosen by almost companies, moreover industries in the world has improved marketing method area significantly to introduce their product to society, so that their product can be popular in the world. There are many facilities that could be made to produce marketing consumer goods particularly which is needed by people every time. The marketing is one of most important areas to earn money to increase profit. in other hand, industries of consumer goods make special advertising department to sell their product even create important rule to support product selling. For example, Unilever Corporation establishes big promotion in all country in the world that is dire on television with highly cost. Secondly, the other aspects of this argument such have on the television screen. The product looks like good quality and it was marketed by famous people like popular actor or singer. Sometimes several people not thinking about salary because they can be influenced by advertising even spend of money to buy something which is not important. As a result of it, people often buy good without consideration. In conclusion, I believe advertising is a good method to introduce the product in the world particularly sales of consumer goods but almost people were influenced by advertising because advertising on the television screen looks a good quality as result people buy without enough review.
Nowadays, the advertising is one of method that can
be increased
to grow sales of
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consumer
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goods
and no longer real need of the society
was sold
.
Personally
, I
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agree
with the statement. There are
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some
reasons that be
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explained
in the
next
paragraph.

Firstly
, the advertising is one of ways which
is chosen
by almost
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companies
,
moreover
industries in the
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world
has
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improved
marketing method area
significantly
to introduce their
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product
to society,
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so
that their
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product
can be popular in the
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world
. There are
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many
facilities that could
be made
to produce marketing
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consumer
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goods
particularly
which
is needed
by
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people
every time. The marketing is one of most
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important
areas to earn money to increase profit.
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in
other hand, industries of
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consumer
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goods
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make
special advertising department to sell their
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product
even create
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important
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rule
to support
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product
selling.
For example
, Unilever Corporation establishes
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big
promotion in all country in the
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world
that is
dire on television with
highly
cost.

Secondly
, the other aspects of this argument such have on the television screen. The
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product
looks like
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good
quality and it
was marketed
by
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famous
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people
like popular actor or singer.
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Sometimes
several
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people
not thinking about salary
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because
they can
be influenced
by advertising even spend of money to
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buy
something which is not
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important
.
As a result
of it,
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people
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often
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buy
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good
without consideration.

In conclusion
, I believe advertising is a
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good
method to introduce the
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product
in the
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world
particularly
sales of
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consumer
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goods
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but
almost
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people
were influenced
by advertising
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because
advertising on the television screen looks a
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good
quality as result
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people
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buy
without
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
enough
review.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
28Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS essay Today, the high sales of popular consumer good reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
275 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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