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Housing and accommodation has become a major problem in many countries around the world, what any some of the man factors that have contributed to this problem? What can be done to help reduce the number of homeless people? Give reasons for your answer and v.2

Housing and accommodation has become a major problem in many countries around the world, what any some of the man factors that have contributed to this problem? What can be done to help reduce the number of homeless people? 2
Resident and accommodation were a big point at issue in all countries around the world. This article shows about the foremost factors that have assign to this problem is fewer job vacancy and then provide job vacancy and then provide job vacancy with open investment from abroad as the most viable solution, followed by a reasoned conclusion. The main factors that make number of homeless people are fewer job vacancies. Most of people thinking to make money usually must become employee. Increasing amount of company is not proportional with amount of jobless. So many people have not resident and cannot pay the primer cost. Possible solutions to reduce the number homeless people are providing many job vacancies to give permission for foreigners to infestation in Indonesia. Singapore is one of the country has a little unemployment because they are success make many investor from the others country to infestation the money in their countries. To conclude, shelter and accommodations is the most important for many people. People become unemployment because of fewer job vacancy and are of solution for that government give permission for people from the others country to make multinational corporation in Indonesia. So that many corporation and the unemployment can work in the corporation and they can make money for resident and accommodation.
Resident and accommodation were a
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countries
around the world. This article
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about the foremost factors that have
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assign
to this problem is fewer
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job
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vacancy
and then provide
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job
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vacancy
and then provide
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job
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vacancy
with open investment from abroad as the most viable solution, followed by a reasoned conclusion.

The main factors that
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make
number of homeless
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people
are fewer
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job
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vacancies
. Most of
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people
thinking to
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make
money
usually
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must
become employee. Increasing amount of
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company
is not proportional with amount of jobless.
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So
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many
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people
have not resident and cannot pay the primer cost.

Possible solutions to
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reduce
the number homeless
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people
are providing
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many
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job
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vacancies
to give permission for foreigners to infestation in Indonesia. Singapore is one of the
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country
has a
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little
unemployment
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because
they are success
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make
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many investor
from the others
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country
to infestation the money in their countries.

To conclude
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important
for
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many
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people
.
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People
become unemployment
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because
of fewer
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job
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vacancy
and are of solution for that
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government
give permission for
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people
from the others
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country
to
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make
multinational corporation in Indonesia.
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So
that
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many corporation
and the unemployment can work in the
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corporation and
they can
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make
money for resident and accommodation.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
28Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay Housing and accommodation has become a major problem in many countries around the world, what any some of the man factors that have contributed to this problem? What can be done to help reduce the number of homeless people? 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
216 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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