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Today, some employees are not sociable with colleagues in their team. What are reasons of this and what measure can be suggested? v.2

Today, some employees are not sociable with colleagues in their team. What are reasons of this and what measure can be suggested? v. 2
Nowadays, sociable capacity in workplace is now one of the most controversial issues that people like debating about. I guess what if when people organize a team randomly, especially at work, what impact on their life? In this essay, I will address my personal opinion and suggest effective methods of making achievable relationship. The first reason why people do not get along with their colleagues is that striking a balance between household and work has been hard so that, recently, many people would prefer hanging out with their real friends rather than their colleagues. Because if you go out or invite your co-workers, many of them do not ensure what topic is natural for conversation. Some kinds of their conversation would be sensitive and super personal. Perhaps, the conversations between both of them affect their working performance as well as the topic could be related to your work. Secondly, atmosphere among themselves may well have a hierarchy structure, but this assumption is that it depends on which company people work in. So the system leads to be distanced by their bosses and mangers and it led to a negative influence on work climates. Another reason is as IT technology has greatly changed those issues ever since chatting app is introduced. Some of employees feel still work even though they already finish their workload. In my opinion, employers and employees should strive to make anti-stressful environment. For example, one of physiology research says generating new leisure in workplace trigger higher performance during the experiment, that time had given excessive workload though. Due to those reasons, could be some of people hesitate to spend time with their co-workers unless personally someone who really is either shy or non-sociable. Also, the role of bosses is no more than to respect each other.
Nowadays, sociable capacity in workplace is
now
one of the most controversial issues that
people
like debating about. I guess what if when
people
organize a team
randomly
,
especially
at
work
, what impact on their life? In this essay, I will address my personal opinion and suggest effective methods of making achievable relationship.

The
first
reason why
people
do not
get
along with their colleagues is that striking a balance between household and
work
has been
hard
so
that, recently,
many
people
would prefer hanging out with their real friends
rather
than their colleagues.
Because
if you go out or invite your co-workers,
many
of them do not ensure what topic is natural for conversation.
Some
kinds of their conversation would be sensitive and super personal. Perhaps, the conversations between both of them affect their working performance
as well as
the topic could
be related
to your
work
.
Secondly
, atmosphere among themselves may well have a hierarchy structure,
but
this assumption is that it depends on which
company
people
work
in.
So
the system leads to
be distanced
by their bosses and mangers and it led to a
negative
influence on
work
climates. Another reason is as IT technology has
greatly
changed
those issues ever since chatting app
is introduced
.
Some of employees
feel
still
work
even though
they already finish their workload.

In my opinion, employers and employees should strive to
make
anti-stressful environment.
For example
, one of physiology research says generating new leisure in workplace trigger higher performance during the experiment, that time had
given
excessive workload though.

Due to those reasons, could be
some
of
people
hesitate to spend time with their co-workers unless
personally
someone who
really
is either shy or non-sociable.
Also
, the role of bosses is no more than to respect each other.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
12Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Today, some employees are not sociable with colleagues in their team. What are reasons of this and what measure can be suggested? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
299 words
6.0
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