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People who travel to another country to live, work or study for a period of time often suffer badly from homesickness. Why is this? What are the best ways to reduce this problem. v.3

People who travel to another country to live, work or study for a period of time often suffer badly from homesickness. Why is this? What are the best ways to reduce this problem. v. 3
Nowadays, there are more and more people who leave their country and go to another place for different purpose. It makes some people feel sick as they face a totally new environment to what they used to grow up. This essay will discuss about the solution of this problem. First of all, there are some ideas to overcome the uncomfortable feeling for someone who miss their home while staying in a different country. Joining communities which operating by people who from the same country. It helps people to make new friends and speak their own language which create a comfortable atmosphere. Moreover, people who from the same background are more easy to understand each other and they may get along well than other people. What is more, contacting with family is one of the good ways to decrease the sickness of missing hometown. People can use internet video phoning and international calling to connect with their family. It is a convenient and simple method to release people’s sickness during their stay in a different country. In addition, family’s support is always the best medicine for people who have homesick problem as family is the most closer people in the world. In conclusion, solving the trouble of missing home while living in another country can be vary. The ideas of mine include meeting same nationality people and calling family regularly.
Nowadays, there are more and more
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people
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who
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leave
their
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country
and go to another place for
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different
purpose. It
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makes
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some
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people
feel sick as they face a
totally
new environment to what they
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used
to grow up. This essay will
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discuss about the
solution of this problem.

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First of all
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some
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ideas
to overcome the uncomfortable feeling for someone
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who
miss their home while staying in a
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different
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country
. Joining communities which operating by
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people
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who
from the same
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country
. It
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helps
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people
to
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make
new friends and speak their
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own
language which create a comfortable atmosphere.
Moreover
,
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people
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who
from the same background are more easy to understand each
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other and
they may
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get
along well than other
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people
.

What is more
, contacting with
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family
is one of the
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good
ways to decrease the sickness of missing hometown.
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People
can
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use
internet video phoning and international calling to connect with their
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family
. It is a convenient and simple method to release
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people’s
sickness during their stay in a
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different
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country
.
In addition
,
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family’s
support is always the best medicine for
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people
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who
have homesick problem as
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family
is the
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most closer
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people
in the world.

In conclusion
, solving the trouble of missing home while living in another
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country
can be
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vary
. The
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ideas
of mine include meeting same nationality
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people
and calling
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family
regularly
.
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25Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay People who travel to another country to live, work or study for a period of time often suffer badly from homesickness. Why is this? What are the best ways to reduce this problem. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
229 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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