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some bussinesses find that their new employees lack in basic interpersonal skills such as lack of ability to work with colleagues as a team. What are the causes and suggest possible solutions. v.1

some bussinesses find that their new employees lack in basic interpersonal skills such as lack of ability to work with colleagues as a team. What are the causes and suggest possible solutions. v. 1
Skill development is considered to be an essential component in the present organisation. A few organisations prefer their new hires to collaborately work with the existing team, however, due to lack of basic interpersonal skills, they fail miserably. The are two major factors that are to be blamed for this problem are inacceptance of the ideas by senior members and biased behaviour by the management. This essay will discuss the two causes and suggest the best way to solve the issue. To embark on, the senior faculty disdains the new joinees. They do not welcome the inputs provided by the new bud, hence their is an unpleasant environment created between them. This is merely because the older staff has a set rule for tackling the problem and are not open to any change. For instance, at time of crisis the team leader will seek for a resolution from an experienced staff, over-looking the fresh ideas of the new employees, this will frustrate the new employees and they debarred themselves from working as a team. However, This scenario, can be avoided by giving equal importance to all the employees, by discussing the problem as a general topic and mutually agreeing on a solution. Secondly, everyone should be equal in the eyes of the management, however, needless to say, it's not true most of the time. Management prefers a few of the existing employees who master the skill of flattering people, and favours them openly. This discrimation in the organisation is unheathly and abstain the new hires and the existing employees to unite as a team. For example, in most of the MNC's to retain the existing employees, they create random job roles, even though they are not fit for that. This is highly unethical and over sighted by the higher mangement but has adverse impacts the new hiree who deserved the role. Due to partial behaviour the new ones, refrain themselves to work in a team. Ergo, this problem can be solved, if the mangement quantifies the qualities of the employees justly. In a nutshell, The are two major factors that are to be blamed for this problem are inacceptance of the ideas by senior members and biased behaviour by the management
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Skill
development
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to be an essential component in the present
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organisation
. A few
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organisations
prefer their
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new
hires to
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collaborately
work with the
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existing
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team
,
however
, due to lack of basic interpersonal
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skills
, they fail
miserably
.
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The are
two major factors that are to
be blamed
for this
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problem
are
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inacceptance
of the
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ideas
by senior members and biased
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behaviour
by the
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management
. This essay will discuss the two causes and suggest the best way to solve the issue.

To embark on, the senior faculty disdains the
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new
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joinees
. They do not welcome the inputs provided by the
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new
bud,
hence
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their
is an unpleasant environment created between them. This is
merely
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because
the older staff has a set
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rule
for tackling the
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problem
and are not open to any
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change
.
For instance
, at time of crisis the
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team
leader will seek for a resolution from an experienced staff, over-looking the fresh
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ideas
of the
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new
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employees
, this will frustrate the
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new
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employees and
they debarred themselves from working as a
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team
.
However
, This scenario, can
be avoided
by giving equal importance to all the
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employees
, by discussing the
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problem
as a general topic and
mutually
agreeing on a solution.

Secondly
, everyone should be equal in the eyes of the
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management
,
however
, needless to say, it's not true most of the time.
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Management
prefers a few of the
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existing
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employees
who master the
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skill
of flattering
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people
, and
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favours
them
openly
. This
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discrimation
in the
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organisation
is
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unheathly
and abstain the
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new
hires and the
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existing
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employees
to unite as a
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team
.
For example
, in most of the
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MNC
's to retain the
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existing
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employees
, they create random job roles,
even though
they are not fit for that. This is
highly
unethical and over sighted by the higher
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mangement
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but
has adverse impacts the
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new
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hiree
who deserved the role. Due to partial
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behaviour
the
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new
ones, refrain themselves to work in a
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team
. Ergo, this
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problem
can
be solved
, if the
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mangement
quantifies the qualities of the
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employees
justly
.

In a nutshell,
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The are
two major factors that are to
be blamed
for this
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problem
are
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inacceptance
of the
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ideas
by senior members and biased
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behaviour
by the
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management
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IELTS essay some bussinesses find that their new employees lack in basic interpersonal skills such as lack of ability to work with colleagues as a team. What are the causes and suggest possible solutions. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
370 words
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