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Today much of the food people eat gets transported from farms that are thousands of miles away. Some people believe it would be better for the environment and the economy if people only consumed food produced by local farmers. Would the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages? v.7

Today much of the food people eat gets transported from farms that are thousands of miles away. Some people believe it would be better for the environment and the economy if people only consumed food produced by local farmers. Would the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages? v. 7
When people purchase food products, they may face the dilemma of whether to consume locally-produced foods, or imported from far-away farms. While only consuming food produced locally brings some benefits for the environment and the economy, excluding food from other areas is not a wise idea. On the one hand, there are several benefits of eating food produced by local farmers only. Admittedly, consuming local food products could contribute to protecting the environment. Purchasing locally manufactured food means there may be fewer uses of long-distance transportations or chemicals to maintain flavours of the food. Therefore, less toxic emissions from transporting vehicles or food preservation chemicals release into the atmosphere, which results in the reduction of environmental pollution. Moreover, it would be likely to boost economic growth if more local food were consumed. When people buy more locally-produced food, they are supporting local farmers and food producers, thereby making sure they earn a sufficient living. The intensive demands for healthy and fresh food tend to create jobs for local people, which develops the local economy. Despite the advantages mentioned above, I believe that they are outweighed by the following problems. Firstly, it could narrow the variety of food when only using local food products. Many factors such as seasonal growing, climate or soil content may prohibit the growth of items in local farms, which makes some particular food do not grow worldwide. As a result, not having the diversity of food items tends to unable to satisfy the needs of customers. Secondly, accommodating regional food only could increase the number of food wasted problems. The lack of imported items makes local farmers less competitive since they are alone in the market, consequently, the food with the organic trademarks could be expensive. Costumers then seek more economical choices, which results in a colossal amount of resources being wasted. In conclusion, I firmly believe that the advantages of consuming regional food are negated by the disadvantages.
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purchase
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products, they may face the dilemma of whether to consume
locally
-produced
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foods
, or imported from far-away farms. While
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only
consuming
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food
produced
locally
brings
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some
benefits for the environment and the economy, excluding
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food
from other areas is not a wise
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idea
.

On the one hand, there are several benefits of eating
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food
produced by
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local
farmers
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only
.
Admittedly
, consuming
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local
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food
products could contribute to protecting the environment. Purchasing
locally
manufactured
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food
means there may be fewer
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uses
of long-distance transportations or chemicals to maintain
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flavours
of the
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food
.
Therefore
, less toxic emissions from transporting vehicles or
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food
preservation chemicals release into the atmosphere, which results in the reduction of environmental pollution.
Moreover
, it would be likely to boost economic growth if more
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local
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food
were consumed
. When
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people
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buy
more
locally
-produced
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food
, they are supporting
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local
farmers and
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food
producers, thereby making sure they earn a sufficient living. The intensive demands for healthy and fresh
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food
tend to create jobs for
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local
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people
, which develops the
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local
economy.

Despite the advantages mentioned above, I believe that they
are outweighed
by the following problems.
Firstly
, it could narrow the variety of
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food
when
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only
using
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local
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food
products.
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Many
factors such as seasonal growing, climate or soil content may prohibit the growth of items in
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local
farms, which
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makes
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some
particular
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food
do not grow worldwide.
As a result
, not having the diversity of
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food
items tends
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to unable to
satisfy the needs of customers.
Secondly
, accommodating regional
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food
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only
could increase the number of
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food
wasted problems. The lack of imported items
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makes
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local
farmers less competitive since they are alone in the market,
consequently
, the
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food
with the organic trademarks could be expensive. Costumers then seek more economical choices, which results in a colossal amount of resources
being wasted
.

In conclusion
, I
firmly
believe that the advantages of consuming regional
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food
are negated
by the disadvantages.
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34Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Today much of the food people eat gets transported from farms that are thousands of miles away. Some people believe it would be better for the environment and the economy if people only consumed food produced by local farmers. Would the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages? v. 7

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
323 words
6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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