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Today much of the food people eat gets transported from farms that are thousands of miles away. Some people believe it would be better for the environment and the economy if people only consumed food produced by local farmers. Would the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages? v.3

Today much of the food people eat gets transported from farms that are thousands of miles away. Some people believe it would be better for the environment and the economy if people only consumed food produced by local farmers. Would the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages? v. 3
Globalization has influenced every field of life, agricultural products have no exception from that. I agree to the above notation that if people prefer local produce more than the imported food items, the economy and environment both would be definitely benefited by this change. In this essay, let us discuss whether the pros of eating local food outweigh the cons. Let us first examine the reasons why people are attracted towards the eatables produced in foreign countries. Firstly, people are always open to try something new to eat because they feel bored eating same old local produce again and again. Secondly, nowadays the foreign food items are easily available. These food items are usually transported from one country to another by air, resulting in a lot of air pollution, so if the people prefer the local produce food items, the air pollution can be reduced indirectly. Not only this the additional preservatives are added to packed foods to keep them fresh for a long time, these chemicals are not only harmful to our health but also to our environment. Agriculture is the backbone of the economies of many countries. The Indian economy is largely dependent of agriculture produce. If Indian government import food items from any other country Indian farmers will suffer. On the other hand, if the government promotes local produce the local farmers will be benefited. The better economic growth can be achieved by increasing the exports and reducing the import of food items, this can be done only by increasing the production of local food and encouraging people to eat local food. As discussed above, it can be concluded that, the advantages of eating local produce outweigh the disadvantages. If people prefer to eat local food items more than the imported food items the economy and environment both will be have a positive impact.
Globalization has influenced every field of life, agricultural products have no exception from that.

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people
prefer
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local
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produce
more than the imported
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food
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items
, the
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economy
and environment both would be definitely benefited by this
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change
. In this essay,
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us discuss whether the pros of eating
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local
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food
outweigh the cons.

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Let
us
first
examine the reasons why
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people
are attracted
towards the eatables produced in foreign
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countries
.
Firstly
,
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people
are always open to try something new to eat
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because
they feel bored eating same
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old
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local
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produce
again and again.
Secondly
, nowadays the foreign
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food
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items
are
easily
available. These
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food
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items
are
usually
transported from one
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country
to another by air, resulting in
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a lot of
air pollution,
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if the
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people
prefer the
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local
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produce
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food
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items
, the air pollution can be
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reduced
indirectly
. Not
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only
this the additional preservatives are
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added
to packed
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foods
to
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keep
them fresh for a long time, these chemicals are not
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only
harmful to our health
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but
also
to our environment.

Agriculture is the backbone of the
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economies
of
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many
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countries
. The Indian
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economy
is
largely
dependent of agriculture
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produce
.
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If
Indian
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government
import
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food
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items
from any other
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country
Indian farmers will suffer.
On the other hand
, if the
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government
promotes
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local
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produce
the
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local
farmers will
be benefited
. The better economic growth can
be achieved
by increasing the exports and reducing the import of
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food
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items
, this can
be done
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only
by increasing the production of
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local
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food
and encouraging
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people
to eat
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local
food.

As discussed above, it can
be concluded
that, the advantages of eating
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local
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produce
outweigh the disadvantages. If
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people
prefer to eat
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local
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food
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items
more than the imported
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food
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items
the
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economy
and environment both will be
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have
a
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positive
impact.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
49Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Today much of the food people eat gets transported from farms that are thousands of miles away. Some people believe it would be better for the environment and the economy if people only consumed food produced by local farmers. Would the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages? v. 3

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
307 words
6
Overall Band Score
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