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Some people say that it is possible to tell a lot about a person’s culture and character from their choice of clothes. Do you agree or disagree? v.5

Some people say that it is possible to tell a lot about a person’s culture and character from their choice of clothes. v. 5
Clothes are important accessories of human beings and some people have the opinion that they can identify an individual's tradition or behaviour by the way they dress. I think this is true to some extent, but not always the case as I will support my view with valid arguments and examples. On one hand, the way some people dress may not give a true reflection of their culture or even the person's behaviour. For instance, some working environments such as banks require their staff members to dress formally in suits and pant trousers. In as much as this style of dressing was adopted from Western culture, it is common in Africa and Asia. On the other hand, it may be possible to predict a person's tradition and way of life through their choice of clothes. For instance, during my education and time spent in the United Kingdom, I was able to identify other Nigerians by the way they dressed, even down to their ethnicity. In addition, some individual's way of life and culture can be suggested by what they wear. For example, a monk is usually dressed in a tunic. To conclude, predicting a person's attitude or background by their clothing can be subjective depending on what the situation is. Just as some people can tell a lot about a person's lifestyle and culture from their dressing, others may not. I suggest people should not make assertive conclusions about a person's persona based on how they dress.
Clothes are
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accessories of human beings and
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some
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people
have the opinion that they can identify an individual's tradition or
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behaviour
by the way they
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dress
. I
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think
this is true to
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some
extent,
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not always the case as I will support my view with valid arguments and examples.

On one hand, the way
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some
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people
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dress
may not give a true reflection of their
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culture
or even the
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person's
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behaviour
.
For instance
,
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some
working environments such as banks require their staff members to
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dress
formally
in suits and pant trousers. In as much as this style of dressing
was adopted
from Western
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culture
, it is common in Africa and Asia.

On the other hand
, it may be possible to predict a
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person's
tradition and way of life through their choice of clothes.
For instance
, during my education and time spent in the United Kingdom, I was able to identify other Nigerians by the way they dressed, even down to their ethnicity.
In addition
,
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some
individual's way of life and
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culture
can
be suggested
by what they wear.
For example
, a monk is
usually
dressed in a tunic.

To conclude
, predicting a
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person's
attitude or background by their clothing can be subjective depending on what the situation is.
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as
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some
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can
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tell
a lot about a
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person's
lifestyle and
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culture
from their dressing, others may not. I suggest
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people
should not
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make
assertive conclusions about a
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person's
persona based on how they
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dress
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8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people say that it is possible to tell a lot about a person’s culture and character from their choice of clothes. v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
247 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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