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Governments should be responsible for funding and controlling scientific research rather than private organizations. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

Governments should be responsible for funding and controlling scientific research rather than private organizations. v. 1
As long as scientific studies are crucial for human lives, almost all nations carry out different research. While it is proposed that financial help and overseeing these findings are supposed to be handled by the Government rather than any private bodies. I completely support it as governing bodies not only possess superior resources, but also restrict its usage. To commence with, the key reason why the government should offer financial help to such researches because they generally have an abundance of funds. Since scientific studies consume a considerable amount of money, which is spent to employ the best scientists and machines, the Government can only support these ever going studies. To illustrate, a group of renowned scientists spent almost 10 years to figure out the drug, which is Paracetamol, to combat fever. Thus, the governing bodies are the appropriate ones to support these studies as long as they need unending financial support. On the other hand, the cogent reason why authorities should ensure its usage is that they hold the right amount of control over the law. Even though all studies are for human welfare, the government needs to chart out a certain law to forbid any misuse of them. For example, as per the law passed in Delhi recently about the medicine, which helps people to quit smoking, that it should not be sold to minors. Therefore, as far as the usage of any scientific research goes the central authorities hold absolute control so that It should not reach an inappropriate group of people. To conclude, since scientific researches are very crucial for mankind; hence it has taken up by most of the country. This essay explained why the authoritative bodies are the right ones to support and control those studies. I believe that the government has more funds to ensure the smooth operation of these findings, and possess legislative rights to pass relevant laws to control its distribution. Nowadays, most often than not, people tend to purchase products without compromising their choices; therefore, a similar range of products are widely available among almost all countries across the globe, leading them to become an identical marketplace. In my opinion, this trend is highly advantageous as it does not only offer variety, but also convenience.
As long as
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scientific
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studies
are crucial for human
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lives
, almost all nations carry out
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different
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research
. While it
is proposed
that financial
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help
and overseeing these findings
are supposed
to
be handled
by the
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Government
rather
than any private
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bodies
. I completely
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support
it as governing
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bodies
not
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only
possess superior resources,
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but
also
restrict its usage.

To commence with, the key reason why the
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government
should offer financial
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help
to such
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researches
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because
they
generally
have an abundance of funds. Since
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scientific
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studies
consume a considerable amount of money, which
is spent
to employ the best scientists and machines, the
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Government
can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
support
these ever going
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
studies
. To illustrate, a group of renowned scientists spent almost 10 years to figure out the drug, which is Paracetamol, to combat fever.
Thus
, the governing
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bodies
are the appropriate ones to
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support
these
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studies
as long as they need unending financial support.

On the other hand
, the cogent reason why authorities should ensure its usage is that they hold the right amount of
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control
over the
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law
.
Even though
all
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studies
are for human welfare, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
needs to chart out a certain
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law
to forbid any misuse of them.
For example
, as per the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
law
passed in Delhi recently about the medicine, which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
to quit smoking, that it should not
be sold
to minors.
Therefore
, as far as the usage of any
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scientific
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
research
goes the central authorities hold absolute
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control
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that It should not reach an inappropriate group of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
.

To conclude
, since
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scientific
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researches
are
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very
crucial for mankind;
hence
it has taken up by most of the country. This essay
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explained
why the authoritative
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bodies
are the right ones to
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support
and
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control
those
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studies
. I believe that the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
has more funds to ensure the smooth operation of these findings, and possess legislative rights to pass relevant
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
laws
to
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control
its distribution.

Nowadays, most
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often
than not,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
tend to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchase
products without compromising their choices;
therefore
, a similar range of products are
widely
available among almost all countries across the globe, leading them to become an identical marketplace. In my opinion, this trend is
highly
advantageous as it does not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
offer variety,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
also
convenience.
17Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
35Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS essay Governments should be responsible for funding and controlling scientific research rather than private organizations. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
375 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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