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Today, more people are travelling than ever before. Why is this the case? What are the benefits of travelling for the traveler? v.19

Today, more people are travelling than ever before. Why is this the case? What are the benefits of travelling for the traveler? v. 19
In recent times, travelling has become a hugely popular activity. This essay will explore a number of possible factors behind this rise in popularity and detail some of the benefits that travelling can offer travellers. One of the main reasons why the number of people travelling has increased is that travel is much more affordable than it used to be. For instance, whereas in the past it might have cost the average person a year’s salary to travel from Britain to Turkey, these days it is possible for British tourists to enjoy a last-minute city break in Istanbul for the cost of half a month’s pay. Another significant cause is the rise in social media. This is influential because websites like Facebook and Instagram present their users with an unending stream of photos of friends in exotic locations, this eliciting a desire to travel. This growth of travel means that many people can now enjoy the benefits of travelling, not least among them a reduction in stress levels. Travellers can use trips abroad to relieve their work-related anxieties and focus on the present moment. This, in turn, can increase their happiness and boost their immune system. A second merit of travelling is that it can help to broaden people’s horizons. For example, exploring unfamiliar regions gives travellers a chance to experience new cultures and meet people from different backgrounds. As a result, travellers can enjoy a deeper appreciation for the world. In conclusion, greater affordability and influence of social media are two reasons why a record number of people are travelling these days. The benefits for these travellers include decreased stress levels and increased awareness and appreciation.
In recent times,
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travelling
has become a
hugely
popular activity. This essay will explore a number of possible factors behind this rise in popularity and detail
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some of the
benefits that
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travelling
can offer
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travellers
.

One of the main reasons why the number of
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people
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travelling
has increased is that travel is much more affordable than it
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used
to be.
For instance
, whereas in the past it might have cost the average person a year’s salary to travel from Britain to Turkey, these days it is possible for British tourists to enjoy a last-minute city break in Istanbul for the cost of half a month’s pay. Another significant cause is the rise in social media. This is influential
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because
websites like Facebook and Instagram present their users with an unending stream of photos of friends in exotic locations, this eliciting a desire to travel.

This growth of travel means that
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many
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people
can
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now
enjoy the benefits of
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travelling
, not least among them a reduction in
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stress
levels.
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can
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use
trips abroad to relieve their work-related anxieties and focus on the present moment. This, in turn, can increase their happiness and boost their immune system. A second merit of
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travelling
is that it can
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help
to broaden
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people’s
horizons.
For example
, exploring unfamiliar regions gives
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travellers
a chance to experience new cultures and
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meet
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people
from
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different
backgrounds.
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,
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travellers
can enjoy a deeper appreciation for the world.

In conclusion
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people
are
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these days. The benefits for these
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travellers
include decreased
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stress
levels and increased awareness and appreciation.
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IELTS essay Today, more people are travelling than ever before. Why is this the case? What are the benefits of travelling for the traveler? v. 19

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
277 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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