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Today more people are travelling than ever before. Why is this case? What are the benefits of travelling for the traveler? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.4

Today more people are travelling than ever before. Why is this case? What are the benefits of travelling for the traveler? v. 4
Nowadays, there is an increase in the number of people travelling to different locations for leisure activities. Travelling facilitates to learn different culture and traditions of the location travelled. I too believe that travelling can benefit the traveller by visiting the location. Firstly, People explore different regions. Some people are travel bloggers and are professionals who like to share information for the places they have visited. For example, there are many online travel bloggers who provide reviews about the location which they have visited. They visit the location and provide ratings for different parameters. These parameters are leisure activities, entertainment, quality of living, food and places to be visited. This helps those who plan to visit these regions for holidays. Secondly, people have increased their spending capacity. Due to which they are travelling to different locations and do not mind the cost of travelling. There are many people who travel for holidays with family. This could be for weddings of friends or relatives or newly married couples for their honeymoon trips. Also, some travel for business and for higher education. For example, if a company has transferred an employee for training purpose for a certain period he will have to be present at the destination. Many students prefer to study and settle abroad due to which there is a tremendous increase in the number of students in foreign universities. In conclusion, travellers travel to take better view and experience as it could be only once they may visit the site. We all need to travel to gain better knowledge and ideas to share our experience with friends and families. By not travelling some people may save funds but the experience gained by travelling can never be expressed in words.
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locations
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facilitates to learn
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different
culture and traditions of the
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location
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believe that
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can benefit the
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by visiting the location.

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bloggers and are professionals
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who
like to share information for the places they have visited.
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, there are
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online
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bloggers
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who
provide reviews about the
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location
which they have visited. They visit the
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location
and provide ratings for
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different
parameters. These parameters are leisure activities, entertainment, quality of living, food and places to
be visited
. This
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those
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plan to visit these regions for holidays.

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have increased their spending capacity. Due to which they are
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to
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locations
and do not mind the cost of
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for holidays with family. This could be for weddings of friends or relatives or
newly
married couples for their honeymoon trips.

Also
,
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travel
for business and for higher education.
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, if a
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company
has transferred an employee for training purpose for a certain period he will
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be present at the destination.
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students prefer to study and settle abroad due to which there is a tremendous increase in the number of students in foreign universities.

In conclusion
,
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travellers
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travel
to take better view and experience as it could be
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only
once they may visit the site. We all need to
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travel
to gain better knowledge and
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ideas
to share our experience with friends and families. By not
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travelling
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some
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may save funds
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the experience gained by
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can never
be expressed
in words.
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33Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS essay Today more people are travelling than ever before. Why is this case? What are the benefits of travelling for the traveler? v. 4

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
289 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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