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Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara Desert or the Antarctica. What are the advantages and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places? v.53

Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara Desert or the Antarctica. What are the advantages and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places? v. 53
Travelling has become increasingly popular in the areas where situations are hard, such as the Sahara Desert or Antarctica. This essay first discusses how the advantages can generate income to the local communities for further development and later explain the dangers of navigating through these areas. There are many advantages when travellers visit regions like the Sahara or Antarctica for the sake of sightseeing. The primary benefit is that this allows the local cities to earn money through the tourism which can be ploughed back into the development of the local regions. In other words, people living in those regions can be benefited from better infrastructure facilities and eradicate other problems with the income generated by these tourists. For example, The Guided factor, an internet blog that focusses particularly on travelling had stated that, In the Sahara Desert, there was a whopping 68% of the rise in the income generated from tourism over the last 4 years which in return the city was developed with better transport connectivity. On the other hand, there are also some drawbacks of tourists visiting these difficult places. The climatic conditions of these regions are unpredictable. This is because it is often believed that in these places are prone to natural disasters, such as sandstorms, tornadoes occur frequently. This might lead to a tragic accident of the tourists visiting at that particular point of time. For instance, The Times has reported several missing cases of tourists who particularly planned a schedule to these remote places during unpredictable weather conditions. Therefore, it is patently clear that tourists need to do enough research before opting for these difficult regions, particularly for sightseeing. In conclusion, it is clear that despite these benefits support the local communities in providing financial stability, it is extremely dangerous to deal with the unpredictable natural disasters in these regions.
Travelling has become
increasingly
popular in the areas where situations are
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hard
, such as the Sahara Desert or Antarctica. This essay
first
discusses how the advantages can generate income to the
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local
communities for
further
development and later
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explain
the
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dangers
of navigating through these areas.

There are
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many
advantages when
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travellers
visit
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regions
like the Sahara or Antarctica for the sake of sightseeing. The primary benefit is that this
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allows
the
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local
cities to earn money through the tourism which can be
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ploughed
back into the development of the
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local
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regions
.
In other words
,
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people
living in those
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regions
can
be benefited
from better infrastructure facilities and eradicate other problems with the income generated by these
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tourists
.
For example
, The Guided factor, an internet blog that
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focusses
particularly
on travelling had stated that, In the Sahara Desert, there was a whopping 68% of the rise in the income generated from tourism over the last 4 years which in return the city
was developed
with better transport connectivity.

On the other hand
, there are
also
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some
drawbacks of
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tourists
visiting these difficult places. The climatic conditions of these
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regions
are unpredictable. This is
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because
it is
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often
believed that in these places are prone to natural disasters, such as sandstorms, tornadoes occur
frequently
. This might lead to a tragic accident of the
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tourists
visiting at that particular point of time.
For instance
, The Times has reported several missing cases of
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tourists
who
particularly
planned a schedule to these remote places during unpredictable weather conditions.
Therefore
, it is
patently
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clear
that
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tourists
need to do
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enough
research
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before
opting for these difficult
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regions
,
particularly
for sightseeing.

In conclusion
, it is
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clear
that despite these benefits support the
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local
communities in providing financial stability, it is
extremely
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dangerous
to deal with the unpredictable natural disasters in these
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regions
.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara Desert or the Antarctica. What are the advantages and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places? v. 53

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
306 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
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