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Some people believe that construction of new public buildings such as museums, towns halls and sporting is more important than renovation of the existing ones, while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinions. v.1

Some people believe that construction of new public buildings such as museums, towns halls and sporting is more important than renovation of the existing ones, while others disagree. v. 1
It is known that growing cities' infrastructure is quite important since communities can perceive great progress either those are new facilities or renew older ones. Although, people often prefer to see new buildings that bring a completely new sight-seeing for locals while others just consider it a money-wasting thus old edifice could be enhanced. This essay will discuss both perspectives and explain why I agree with having brand new constructions instead of renovate old ones. Firstly, communities seek to transform their city mainly for appearance. For some citizens, by creating mesmerizing building such as big skyscrapers, enormous stadiums or enigmatic town halls, they could feel their pride sense highly satisfied. And, even though, it means paying higher taxes, they are wide open to do so. Secondly, there are others who are more attached to their city roots. Hence, having an old infrastructure remodeled could be a smarter decision. This is not always the best practice, for instance, in 2011 a well-known stadium in Miami downtown was transformed into a whole new sport facility where football fans could witness their favourite game. However, security standards were rejected as resulted of several evaluations from architecture experts that argued that the building foundations were not strong enough and may represent a life-threat for the visitors. Eventually the building was demolished and now the city has financial issues in order to put up a new stadium. In my opinion and to conclude, cities must be aware that is not only about budget cuts or savings, but also about security matters aimed to themselves. I do believe that having more modern infrastructure will put the right ground in a long-term vision for communities as they can feel safer and prouder.
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is known
that growing cities' infrastructure is quite
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important
since communities can perceive great progress either those are
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new
facilities or renew older ones. Although,
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people
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often
prefer to
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see
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new
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buildings
that bring a completely
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new
sight-seeing for locals while others
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just
consider it a money-wasting
thus
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old
edifice could
be enhanced
. This essay will discuss both perspectives and
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explain
why I
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agree
with having brand
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new
constructions
instead
of renovate
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old
ones.

Firstly
, communities seek to transform their city
mainly
for appearance. For
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some
citizens, by creating mesmerizing
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building
such as
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big
skyscrapers, enormous stadiums or enigmatic town halls, they could feel their pride sense
highly
satisfied. And,
even though
, it means paying higher taxes, they are wide open to do
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so
.

Secondly
, there are others who are more attached to their city roots.
Hence
, having an
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old
infrastructure remodeled could be a smarter decision. This is not always the best practice,
for instance
, in 2011 a well-known stadium in Miami downtown
was transformed
into a whole
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
sport facility where football fans could witness their
Possible spelling mistake. 'favourite' is British English.
favourite
game.
However
, security standards
were rejected
as resulted of several evaluations from architecture experts that argued that the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
building
foundations were not strong
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enough
and may represent a life-threat for the visitors.
Eventually
the
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building
was demolished
and
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now
the city has financial issues in order to put up a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
stadium.

In my opinion and
to conclude
,
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cities
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must
be aware
that is
not
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only
about budget
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cuts
or savings,
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but
also
about security matters aimed to themselves. I do believe that having more modern infrastructure will put the right ground in a long-term vision for communities as they can feel safer and prouder.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that construction of new public buildings such as museums, towns halls and sporting is more important than renovation of the existing ones, while others disagree. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
285 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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