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Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic. What are the advantages and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.19

Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic. What are the advantages and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places? v. 19
In recent years, there has been a significant increase in the number of individuals travelling to tourist destinations with abominable natural conditions. In this essay, both merits and drawbacks will be addressed in detail. In the first place, there are indisputable benefits which result from going to places with poor conditions. A key point worth emphasizing is that an area with poor conditions is highly likely to remain unspoiled. A good illustration of this is Tibet. Due to the complex traffic conditions and the thin air, few make it as a travelling destination finally even though many may always be longing for a trip to it. As a result, there are countless spectacular, pure natural landscapes in a large proportion of Tibet without pollution and commercialization. Without a shadow of a doubt, exploring such the untraversed scenery could be an unforgettable experience. In addition, quite a few hold the view that it is the tough travelling which could enable them to push themselves to the limit. From their point of view, a challenging trip is far more worthwhile than a dull and boring one. Nevertheless, it cannot be ignored that there are some downsides associated with travelling to difficult places. The first disadvantage which should not be overlooked is the cost of time and money. Since an area with poor conditions is always exceptionally far from the airport or train station, one has little choice but to endure a long exhausting road trip to get there. Definitely, this also costs an arm and a leg. Another drawback is this kind of trip is always full of danger. A prime example of this is to discover the desert of western China by self-driving. It may sound fascinating at first. However, the story is different when a severe mechanical failure occurs. Since the lack of drinking water and mobile phone signal, it could be life-threatening in such a situation. In conclusion, while some advantages of difficult travelling may seem convincing and appealing, we have to also ponder the cost and the danger at the same time. As such, one should try to keep a balance between the two sides.
In recent years, there has been a significant increase in the number of individuals
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
travelling
to tourist destinations with abominable natural conditions. In this essay, both merits and drawbacks will
be addressed
in detail.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
In
the
first
place, there are indisputable benefits which result from going to places with poor conditions. A key point worth emphasizing is that an area with poor conditions is
highly
likely to remain unspoiled. A
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
illustration of this is Tibet. Due to the complex traffic conditions and the thin air, few
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
it as a
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travelling
destination
finally
even though
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many may
always be longing for a
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trip
to it.
As a result
, there are countless spectacular, pure natural landscapes in a large proportion of Tibet without pollution and commercialization. Without a shadow of a doubt, exploring such the
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untraversed
scenery could be an unforgettable experience.
In addition
, quite a
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few hold
the view that it is the tough
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travelling
which could enable them to push themselves to the limit. From their point of view, a challenging
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trip
is far more worthwhile than a dull and boring one.

Nevertheless
, it cannot be
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ignored
that there are
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some
downsides associated with
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travelling
to difficult places. The
first
disadvantage which should not
be overlooked
is the cost of time and money. Since an area with poor conditions is always
exceptionally
far from the airport or train station, one has
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little
choice
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but
to endure a long exhausting road
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trip
to
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get
there. Definitely, this
also
costs an arm and a leg. Another drawback is this kind of
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trip
is always full of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
danger
. A prime example of this is to discover the desert of western China by self-driving. It may sound fascinating at
first
.
However
, the story is
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different
when a severe mechanical failure occurs. Since the lack of drinking water and mobile phone signal, it could be life-threatening in such a situation.

In conclusion
, while
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some
advantages of difficult
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travelling
may seem convincing and appealing, we
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have to
also
ponder the cost and the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
danger
at the same time. As such, one should try to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
a balance between the two sides.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic. What are the advantages and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places? v. 19

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
357 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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