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today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as sahara desert or the antartic. what are the benefits and disadvantages for touristic who visit places? v.1

today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as sahara desert or the antartic. what are the benefits and disadvantages for touristic who visit places? v. 1
Nowadays, the number of individuals choosing to travel to unusual places is on a rise. Tourists visiting these areas can benefit the economy of a country and satisfy the traveller expectations, however, there will be some drawbacks. One benefit evidence for touring in an adventurous place is exploring new challenging activities. In other words, individuals who travel more often eager for fresh and exciting trips, therefore they choose to engage in unusual visits to satisfy their egos. For instance, people who are part in different trips, will choose to travel and engage in a new experience such as climbing mountains, or going on safari trips. Another reason for why tourism in places where conditions are hard is beneficial in the economic boost resulting from tourists spending their money in places such as local restaurants and souvenir shops. On the other hand, countries that are not developed lack some basic facilities for a comfortable trip. Firstly, In some countries, transportation is barely found causing stress in relocating from one place to another. Tourists can either wait long to find a taxi or a bus in order to commute or pay for a private taxi driver. Secondly, medical assistance can be either difficult to find or find that it is available in a low-quality services. For example, individuals engaging in dangerous activities are more at risk, if an incident occurs, medical health will be a major concern for those travellers. In conclusion, while it is both advantageous and exciting to pick hard conditions countries, but there will be several drawbacks regarding utilities and health care.
Nowadays, the number of individuals choosing to travel to unusual
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is on a rise. Tourists visiting these areas can benefit the economy of a
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country
and satisfy the
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traveller
expectations,
however
, there will be
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some
drawbacks.

One benefit evidence for touring in an adventurous
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place
is exploring new challenging activities.
In other words
, individuals who travel more
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often
eager for fresh and exciting
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trips
,
therefore
they choose to engage in unusual visits to satisfy their egos.
For instance
,
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people
who are part in
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different
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trips
, will choose to travel and engage in a new experience such as climbing mountains, or going on safari
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trips
. Another reason for why tourism in
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places
where conditions are
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hard
is beneficial in the economic boost resulting from tourists spending their money in
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places
such as local restaurants and souvenir shops.

On the other hand
,
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countries
that are not developed lack
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some
basic facilities for a comfortable
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trip
.
Firstly
, In
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some
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countries
, transportation is
barely
found causing
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stress
in relocating from one
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place
to another. Tourists can either wait long to find a taxi or a bus in order to commute or pay for a private taxi driver.
Secondly
, medical assistance can be either difficult to find or find that it is available in a low-quality services.
For example
, individuals engaging in
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dangerous
activities are more at
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risk
, if an incident occurs, medical health will be a major concern for those
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travellers
.

In conclusion
, while it is both advantageous and exciting to pick
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hard
conditions
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countries
,
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but
there will be several drawbacks regarding utilities and health care.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as sahara desert or the antartic. what are the benefits and disadvantages for touristic who visit places? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
263 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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