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Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara Desert or the Antartic. What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places? v.48

Traveling offers people a wide view of the world. Because humans are curious creatures, they often have an innate interest in the unknown things, so that today we witness a lot of trips to difficult and remote places in the world such as the Sahara Desert or Antarctica. In this essay, I will examine the positive and negative aspects of this phenomenon. On the one hand, these trips help the economic conditions as well as create job opportunities in the region. Since living conditions in such places are very difficult, facilities for travelers such as hotels, resorts, and restaurants can also be suitable for the natives of the area. In addition, those who travel to these areas can see things that are uniquely beautiful, and they may not be able to replicate such a unique experience anywhere else. On top of that, the experience of hard travel gives a person a sense of power and self-confidence that can affect a person's life. On the other hand, unfortunately, there has always been a direct relationship between tourist areas and environmental pollution. In fact, wherever human footprints have observed, the environment has somehow threatened. In addition, traveling to these areas is very dangerous and requires a lot of physical strength and ability. For example, in recent years we have heard various reports of people that being injured or killed during traveling to Everest. In conclusion, in my opinion, the experience of difficult traveling can be very exciting as long as the person is both physically and mentally healthy and ensures and respects to their surrounding.
Traveling offers
people
a wide view of the world.
Because
humans are curious creatures, they
often
have an innate interest in the unknown things,
so
that
today
we witness
a lot of
trips to difficult and remote places in the world such as the Sahara Desert or Antarctica. In this essay, I will examine the
positive
and
negative
aspects of this phenomenon.

On the one hand, these trips
help
the economic conditions
as well
as create job opportunities in the region. Since living conditions in such places are
very
difficult, facilities for travelers such as hotels, resorts, and restaurants can
also
be suitable for the natives of the
area
.
In addition
, those who travel to these
areas
can
see
things that are
uniquely
beautiful
, and they may not be able to replicate such a unique experience anywhere else.
On top of that
, the experience of
hard
travel gives a person a sense of power and self-confidence that can affect a person's life.

On the other hand
, unfortunately, there has always been a direct relationship between tourist
areas
and environmental pollution. In fact, wherever human footprints have observed, the environment has somehow threatened.
In addition
, traveling to these
areas
is
very
dangerous
and requires
a lot of
physical strength and ability.
For example
, in recent years we have heard various reports of
people
that
being injured
or killed during traveling to Everest.

In conclusion
, in my opinion, the experience of difficult traveling can be
very
exciting as long as the person is both
physically
and mentally healthy and ensures and respects to their surrounding.
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IELTS essay Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic. What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?

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  American English
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