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Today, many people do not realise how important the natural world is. Why is this? How can people learn more about the importance of the natural world? v.3

Today, many people do not realise how important the natural world is. Why is this? How can people learn more about the importance of the natural world? v. 3
These Days, more and more individuals are not aware of how crucial the natural world is. The main reason for this situation is technology, pollution, and global warming. Fortunately, some ways can be used to educate people on how important the environment is. Such as educating people on methods used to preserve nature particularly, tree planting and proper waste disposal. Firstly, in the current world technology is spreading widely in all areas globally. Additionally, companies are using food preservatives to preserve food for long. The reason being, in the present day the rates of environmental pollution are high as well as deforestation. This results in global warming and farm produce are low. Therefore individuals are well catered for by the food production institutions, thus making the natural world less important. For instance, many supermarkets are selling baked beans and frozen vegetables which are easily accessible by the community. As a result of this, people do not notice the importance of the natural world. On the contrary, some strategies can be used to educate the public on the importance of the environment. First is by creating awareness of the side effects of living in a polluted environment, proper waste disposal, and ways to preserve nature. For example, hosting mass campaigns of tree planting and litter collection can be introduced by the government or non-governmental organizations. Therefore, if these strategies are utilized well people will get fond of the natural world and learn the detrimental impact negligence towards the environment can cause. To conclude, people do not find it vital to take care of the environment. Given that, technology is spreading tremendously in the universe and the companies are making use of chemical preservatives which can prevent food decay due to low farm produce caused by global warming. Although, holding mass campaigns on tree planting and litter collection, as well as educating the public on proper waste disposal along with ways to prevent different kinds of pollution is vital and this can help educate people thus saving the natural world.
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is. The main reason for this situation is technology, pollution, and global warming.
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environment
is. Such as educating
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on methods
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to preserve nature
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, in the
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technology is spreading
widely
in all areas globally.
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companies
are using
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food
preservatives to preserve
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food
for long. The reason being, in the present day the rates of environmental pollution are high as
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well
as deforestation. This results in global warming and farm produce are low.
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Therefore
individuals are
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catered for by the
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food
production institutions,
thus
making the
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world
less
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.
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supermarkets are selling baked beans and frozen vegetables which are
easily
accessible by the community.
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people
do not notice the importance of the
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world.

On the contrary
,
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strategies can be
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used
to educate the public on the importance of the
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environment
.
First
is by creating awareness of the side effects of living in a polluted
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environment
, proper waste disposal, and ways to preserve nature.
For example
, hosting mass campaigns of tree planting and litter collection can
be introduced
by the
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government
or non-governmental organizations.
Therefore
, if these strategies
are utilized
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people
will
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fond of the
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and learn the detrimental impact negligence towards the
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environment
can cause.

To conclude
,
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people
do not find it vital to take care of the
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environment
.
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Given
that, technology is spreading
tremendously
in the universe and the
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companies
are making
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use
of chemical preservatives which can
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prevent
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food
decay due to low farm produce caused by global warming. Although, holding mass campaigns on tree planting and litter collection, as
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well
as educating the public on proper waste disposal along with ways to
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prevent
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different
kinds of pollution is vital and this can
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help
educate
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people
thus
saving the
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world
.
18Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
29Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Today, many people do not realise how important the natural world is. Why is this? How can people learn more about the importance of the natural world? v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
338 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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